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| "Ranma no Zettai Kareshi" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: WootMannen [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2010 07:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great stuff all around. Can't wait for the next chapters, see how Ranma will deal with Akane, see how Akane will deal with Ranma, and, hopefully, see how much Ranma will *freak* when she tries Happosai's perversion fu on him/her. Changed or not, more tolerant of his girl form or not, acceptance or no acceptance, I hardly think Ranma will be able to deal rationally with something as bluntly forward as Akane's new techniques. Hehehe. Well, it promises to be interesting in any case, whatever happens. I like the Shimeru's. They're an interesting bunch to mix things up with, and their own little gender problem really fits in rather well with the rest of the Ranma-verse. Keep up the good work!!!
| Title: Chapter 15
Reviewed By: Dumbledork [MediaMiner Member] On: May 24, 2010 02:27 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't care for the yaoi bit, but I love the rest. I wonder if Akane using her new techniques on Tamao could be qualified as rape. It looks like Akane is turning into a second Happosai. She's always lacked control. Can't wait for more.
| Reviewed By: Tai Khan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2010 12:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
Chapters 01-09, overall, were a good read, demonstrating Ranma's changing persona. Problems: 1) From the outset of the story Ranma is far too 'emotionally' female in regards to reactions to Kyouya, both in what he says and does. 2) The downright _malicious_ behavior of the elder Tendo sisters towards Ranma is hardly conducive in getting him to view Akane in any kind of favorable light, their implied goal, when Akane herself treats him even worse than they do...but she, at least, has _some_ reasoning for her behavior. 3) The highly accelerated rate at which Ranma falls in love with Kyouya, barely a week, which, admittedly, isn't beyond believability...if Ranma had been born a heterosexual female, that is. Chapters 10-11. Seemed to be little more than humorous filler at the Amazon's expense, as well as eliminating them from the competition for Ranma. Also, a poor showing by the Tendos, with Kasumi's plea to Ranma not to give up on Akane sounding more like an attempt to lay a 'guilt trip' on him. Chapter 12. Ranma knows full well her mother's views on the matter of family honor, therefore Ranma would know that she would be expected to give the Shimeru engagement serious thought. She never gives it any real thought, at all, that can be seen in the story. There's no real concern that she's being asked to be a 'bride' and, potentially, become a 'mother' herself. None. Ranma's _fully_ running in 'female' mode now, and her masculinity is a fading memory...and only two weeks after getting her first 'boyfriend'. Meets her potential Shimeru fiance and is willing to spill her/his entire life story within short order to what is still essentially a complete stranger. Chapter 13. Ranma Saotome has left the fic! I don't know who that little redheaded tramp is, but it sure as heck ain't Ranma. Only a couple hours after meeting the guy and _she's_ initiating sex! Going down on him simply because he's aroused and then eagerly surrendering her virginity. Followed by a bit of yaoi fun in the shower a short time later. Nope, this is in no way, shape, or form, Ranma Saotome, former man among men and heterosexual male (at least mentally). Essentially, if you wanted Ranma-chan to have sex with a guy...you should have had her break her promise to Genma and bang Kyouya on his last night. That, at least, would have been marginally believable, considering 'her' emotional investment in her 'boyfriend'. I'll try to finish reading the remaining chapters you've posted, but...don't know if I can. The Ranma presented herein has pretty much become an original character since Kyouya's removal from the fic.
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