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| "Ranma and Akane - A Saiyan Story" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] | Title: too much of a Mary Sue
Reviewed By: chronodekar [MediaMiner Member] On: February 17, 2011 19:59 EST
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The story has too many Mary Sue elements. Life is going a bit too perfect. What kind of a plot is that? Now, leaving that aside, I really don't appreciate the fact that everyone has access to the DBZ manga. If you could have cut that out, I think things would look a bit better. And an all-female gang? -sigh- I like this story - it's well-written and enjoyable. But, the latest chapter - well, it's stretching things a bit too much for me. -chronodekar | Reviewed By: deathgeonous [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2011 19:59 EST
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Now this is just fun, and slightly crazy! Well, thanks for writing this, bye for now. | Title: love it
Reviewed By: xepher [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2010 20:40 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the best fan fic i like reading it. It was awesome but the fact u made akane and ranma do it early was a little wrong they should have waited but over all it awesome keep up the good work
| Reviewed By: shadowalker666 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2010 04:27 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very enjoyable story with my favourite pairing. As you said they are OOC but given that they are not human despite upbringing and the changes this caused along with the involvement of Urd i think these changes are all pretty much accounted for. Even the way it effects the Tendos makes sense. Looking forward to a long story with many updates
| Title: ch9
Reviewed By: borgrabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: October 18, 2010 10:05 EDT
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Story is going well. Look forward to regeneration of tails? When do Z Fighters meet the enemy?
| Reviewed By: Puto [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2010 07:51 EDT
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Looking good. Kunô being a DBZ nerd is... interesting, I guess. Keep it up, I guess.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: October 03, 2010 00:34 EDT
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Heh, if Nabiki saw the packets of instant Nanichuan (sp?) she'd probably think that Akane had already played around with Pegging before, hehehe. Still, it's a fun story so far, and this, and your other tales, have given me more than a few ideas. This was a bit of a middle chapter, but sets the tone and placement for something deeper, later on. Of course, who are the two other members of the Z fighters (that was the idea, wasn't it?) Makes me think Pantyhose Taro is one, but is the other a second cursed girl Ryoga, or Shampoo? Either way, it'll be interesting to read. Continue to update, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: Puto [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2010 06:08 EDT
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This is pretty awesome. It's nice to see a Saiyan Ranma and Akane without outright bringing in the entire DBZ cast like most people would (To be honest, I don't see any of the Ranma cast lasting 5 seconds against the likes of Gokû and Vegeta). Looking forward to the next chapter.
| Title: Chapter 'O Truth
Reviewed By: borgrabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2010 10:15 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter! •│•│•│•│•│̶ 6;│•│•│• Ben Haiku'd: •│•│•│•│•│̶ 6;│•│•│• Love's shared kiss-exalts•│•│• It does-spiting winter's storms•│•│• An aspect-ageless•│•│•
| Title: ch4
Reviewed By: borgrabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2010 00:55 EDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
An acknowledging haiku: - Fantastic story- Just now reaching chapter three- Muse be kind to thee-
| Title: CH3
Reviewed By: borgrabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2010 15:02 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good story. I'd write a haiku if this dam ned site allowed carriage returns.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2010 14:05 EDT
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Hmmm, the only issue I have is that Super Saijin, is well, basically the form of becoming a god of war. With all the training and such that Goku and Vegita did before hitting it, they were insanely powerful. And really, it acts like a massive power amplifier, changing goku who was at about half a million before transforming the first time to close to 5 million (power levels) when he went to max power. Ranma, on the other hand, would be much, MUCH weaker, as he hadn't done the gravity training, or anything else really. Tbh, Ranma in canon, after Saffron, would probably have been as powerful as say Krillin when Vegita and Nappa arrived. Or at least, that;s my opinion. Making Ranma powerful enough to destroy the planet already would be a bit of a stretch. In any case, continue to update, ja ne.
| Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2010 02:08 EDT
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Hmmm, a pretty intereting story gem, well worth reading, if only for the sake of a Saijin ranma and akane, but it does lend itself well to the plot of the series (get beaten in a fight/challenge? get stronger immediately and through training!). Though how would pressure points and such work with an entirely different biology? Could be explained by their use not working quite right. Plus, how the hell does a saijin even see/smell the world? And interesting dilemna for you to ponder. Update again soon, ja ne.
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