| "Truth Sphere" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Jleonard [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2005 17:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
All I can say is that you need to read some good author's and emulate their writing styles. I would have enjoyed the story more if the dialoge was broken up more and some other Grammarical errors hadn't happened. The story itself is good, if far fetched. There were plenty of holes in it that could easily be fixed by setting it sooner in the series, like before the wedding. I think that Nodoka didn't really give Ranma a choice that needed thought, never see mom again or stay with father. By the way; what happened to the seppuku pledge? Read some Robert Jordan and see how he writes everything.
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Reviewed By: Shinigami On: August 09, 2003 15:55 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hm, good but since I'm not sure who Ranko should choose, it should be a trio...Of Ryoga, Mousse and Ranko... Well at least the Amazons should be open-minded about it... Pls have Nabiki show up in latter chappies! Since I like her character in this...Update ASAP! |
Reviewed By: Tok On: March 13, 2003 14:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You could have made it alot longer, but I guess it's OK if you update soon ;) |
Reviewed By: Dragonfyre On: March 13, 2003 06:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is the most convoluted fic I have ever read. You go way to fast with all these things and you could have stretched this story out alot more. |
Reviewed By: Inuyasha-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2002 23:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was the oddest thing I have ever read and coming from someone who has read over 20,000 fanfics in his lifetime that is really something. I loved it. It was hilarious.I couldn't make through two sentences without having to stop reading so I calm down. ^_^ |
