| "Sailor Moon Online: Hollow Fragment" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Title: Chapter 22
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2015 11:12 PDT
Comment/Review:
Mjolnir misspelled as Mionir again. You misspelled beat/beaten as
better after the King of Skeletons defeat. Duel Welding &
Aincard errors present too.
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Title: Chapter 21
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2015 10:51 PDT
Comment/Review:
You misspelled reverse as reserve twice. The Duel Welding &
Aincard errors are there too.
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Title: Chapter 20
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2015 10:07 PDT
Comment/Review:
You misspelled Dual Wielding as Duel Welding in this chapter too. I
think you may may want to go double check your writing of the words
in the other chapters. You misspelled status as stasis twice in
this chapter. Aincrad misspelled as Aincard again.
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Title: Chapter 19
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2015 09:21 PDT
Comment/Review:
We're is misposted as We&rsqu o;re by the site for some reason.
This isn't the 1st time I've seen Mediaminer do this with
apostrophes in your story either. You misspelled severed as served
twice when Kayaba being Usagi's uncle is brought up. You kept
misspelling Aincrad as Aincard.
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Title: Chapter 17
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2015 08:00 PDT
Comment/Review:
I think you misspelled before as become when Kirito & Usagi
found Sinon and being as begin near there too. You misspelled
Sacred Fire as Scared Fire the 1st time it's mentioned in the
chapter. You left out the y in "they" when their part was in the
dungeon with Lisbeth & Strea.You misspelled Wielding as Welding
through the whole chapter. You misspelled Mjolnir as Mjoinir.
Distributed is misspelled as disturbed after the Queen of Ants
death.
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Title: Chapter 16
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2015 23:01 PDT
Comment/Review:
Another good chapter. You misspelled status as stasis & at 1
point linked as liked.
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Title: Chapter 15
Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 24, 2015 21:35 PDT
Comment/Review:
This was another good chapter but you misspelled fell as feel at
one point & wrote liar instead of lair. You also accidentally
wrote bad instead of mad once in the chapter.
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Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2015 09:20 PDT
Comment/Review:
Once again another good chapter. I'm wondering when the
brainwashing will show up though.
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Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2015 07:10 PDT
Comment/Review:
Another good chapter with an interesting twist.
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Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 10, 2015 12:10 PDT
Comment/Review:
Another good chapter. Keep writing.
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Reviewed By: hornofdesolation [MediaMiner Member] On: July 03, 2015 08:05 PDT
Comment/Review:
Another good chapter Gallantmon of the Hazard. Keep up the good
writing.
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