Reviewed By: white rabbit [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2002 18:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
This fic sounds like it has a lot of promise and I like the storyline a lot. The dragons and the main character's relationship reminds me a little of the "Dragons of Pern" series. The grammar and spelling are excellent (there are too many stories that don't have that and it gets annoying). My suggestion is to add a little more descriptions of what's going on, it helps if when writing you ask yourself not only what's going on, but how the main character sees things, smells things, feels things, etc. Questions like "What does she see when she first wakes up?" "How does she feel when she sees this girl?" etceteras. It's a great start to your story and keep writing! -w.r |
