| "Expecting The Unexpected" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Firemore On: July 24, 2005 11:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I both agree and disagree with Branner Hawk you didn't do too bad in doing a little realism though the problem was not very convincing and I too had problems with characterisations and I feel that bit with Heero and how you portrayed was a mistake that ruined the fic. Relationships have problems but they don't dissappear by magic my friend. Frankly you shouldn't let your over idolisation of Relena mar your writing.
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Reviewed By: Branner Hawk On: July 24, 2005 11:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a horrible fic, the characterisations and the plot were just plain awful! Especially how you characterised Une, there would have been no scandal and if there was such a simple solution why wasn't it done in the first place. Everything about this fic was total bullshit and I thought this was going to be good and you know what this could actually have been a decent fic if not for a few rough edges, plot holes and that god awful part with Heero. I mean give me a break! Relena changing him!? Changing him into a obnoxious little snob!? Who passes judgement on everything and has become as spoiled as Relena? To turn Heero self righteous! Don't even presume to keep insulting our intelligence with all this Relena mush, despite what a big fan you are. But then all Relena fans are just prissy little girls who live in the same deluded world as Relena am I right?
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Reviewed By: wren_legacy [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2003 13:21 CDT
Comment/Review:
I liked your story very much. What Timberwolf said was quite rude and he can kiss my ass. Anyways, your brought a reality to this story that isn't often present in stories. They had problems,but over the long run they worked them out instead of just having them magically solved. in reality no couple has a relationship without problems and you showed that very well. I enjoyed your story and hope you write more like it. Ja ne! |
Reviewed By: Kiki On: January 01, 2003 00:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, I loved this. Very romantic. I've never read a story with this pairing before and thought it was unique. The Une/Treize angle was a nice touch. I had always thought Treize manipulated her horribly, even though she did love him. I wish there were more pairings with Une and Trowa. |
Reviewed By: Timber Wolf [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2002 11:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a load of utter SHIT!!!!
An interesting pairing but the potential has been wasted.
A lot of stupid dialogue that would embaress the worst actor.
I did not like how Heero was portrayed, he was portrayed as sanctimonious MORON!!! HE IS NOT A MORON!!!
It should have been kept between Trowa and Une and it would have better. But you didn't you brought another into it and ruined it COMPLETELY!!! |
Reviewed By: mandy On: September 16, 2002 14:49 CDT
Comment/Review:
AH !!!!!! this was so cute!!!!!!!!!!!!! adn your back in business again thank you!! |
Reviewed By: Morgan On: September 16, 2002 19:03 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I gave higher points for things I pay more attention to. Personally I thought it was excellent all around and a pairing that I surprisingly enjoyed for its originality I confess I had never considered those to paired up before and now that I've seen it written I'd consider them again. |
