| Reviewed By: doc dingle On: October 16, 2002 23:41 CDT|
Style of Writing: 8 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10
The style is of the first person with the possible second person to third person inclusion. I thought it was very good in that regards.
Spelling and Grammer were above normal since a lot of people can't spell and this person obviously can. Perhaps precision would help if you wrote several of your stories on paper then typed them in the word processor. You may find your style elevating even more so than you think. Good as it maybe however.
Originally? Hmm well if you can write a love story with the occasional subject transversion, I think this is sufficient for fanfiction. Good creativity. Keep exploring your style.
This was very enjoying to read. I read all the parts of this story and found some pieces here and there that can be colored in. But overall I would say Talent is a factor.
I give you an overall rating of 8. You end in an average "whats next?" idea. I could see you were less than ready to finish the chapter as you wanted. Perhaps a change here and there is warranted. But overall I like the basis of your story. You do have some talent that perhaps you dont see as of yet.