| "Shadow Army" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: Masamune The Forgotten [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2003 19:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
have you heard of paragraphs?
do u know that you MUST start a new paragraph when a new idea is being presented?
do u know that you MUST start a new paragraph when a someone/someone new speaks?
All of what I have said is gramatically correct. It IS grammatically INCORRECT to not follow these rules.
I was going to start reading your fac fic, but when I looked ahead and found out that your chapters are ONE HUGE PARAGRAPH, I stopped myself. If you have ever read a book, you'll see that books are written in paragraphs.
This isnt meant to insult you. Its contructive critisism. This review is only meant to make you a better writer. |
Reviewed By: yankeefan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2002 19:33 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The 3rd and 4th chapters were so cool. I liked the idea about using the Nighthawk. There wasn't a lot of spelling mistakes in it. Keep it up !!!!!! |
Reviewed By: Madyamisam [MediaMiner Member] On: October 27, 2002 20:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cooool.... Violence, destruction, blood, gore. MUWHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!!!!! *composes herself* Grammars better here. And so much actions goin' on. Please... do continue. |
Reviewed By: Joe On: October 27, 2002 17:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
you leave the reader hanging in supense but it is a really good story |
Reviewed By: yankeefan [MediaMiner Member] On: October 13, 2002 09:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This was a really good first chapter. You had better spelling and grammar than in Hellfire. You should have made the chapter longer. I hoped my review helped you. Keep it up! |
Reviewed By: Lord Kain [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2002 15:55 CDT
Comment/Review:
just so ya know
Indigo and Johto are on one Continent called Kanto. |
Reviewed By: yankeefan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 07, 2002 10:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Chp. 5-6 were outstanding! I can't wait till chp.7 comes out! The only problem was that you had spelling mistakes but other than that it was cool. Keep Writing!!! |
