| Reviewed By: Bab-il Ghost [MediaMiner Member] On: June 13, 2007 04:02 CDT|
Style of Writing: 5 of 10Comment/Review:
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10
What was the _point_ of this story? You introduce a second project which makes no sense whatsoever (NERV and SEELE were working for a decade on developing the Evangelions, no hints of any side-projects) and gets no description. We don't even know what your original characters look like or what these 'Demon' units are supposed to be or do. The fic doesn't tell us anything new about Shinji or Gendo. It isn't even interesting to look at, with strings of meaningless numbers and huge breaks between short sentences. Then there's the spelling. If you're going to try for pointless religious symbolism (and by not developing your characters at all, it is indeed pointless), at least learn how to spell the names correctly. It's Abel, not Able. You've also got a host of minor misspellings and run-on sentences galore. This reviewer says: Don't bother, you'll just want the two minutes of your life you wasted reading it back once you're done.