| "The Forgotten one" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Princess Aymei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2002 02:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
cool! I liked this chapter...It's great!!!! just two mistakes in from the line that has HAD in it (thought it might have been a mistake)and one other can't remember now that comes after but i wasn't concentrating on them much ^____^ sorry, but lord it is still awesome. No really...I love it. It's like watching this cool kind of movie. You're a very good writer can't wait till I get back to this story now.
I'm sorry I am taking so long to read this but I have three courseworks of 3000, 3000 and 3500 due in on monday, after that I can finish this story. Thanks for the email though I'll get to your current chapter in no time you just watch. I dare anyone to keep me away. xD |
Reviewed By: Princess Aymei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2002 02:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay I read another chapter...I couldn't resist...at the rate I'm going I just might read another but this chapter was good. The banter in the park (twas lovely) and then the stranger who either had too much sugar or is just good at plying young 'pretty' girls with compliments. I call em 'sweet-talkers' and he is one from a mile off. ^___^
However aymei isn't Darrien's biggest fan and I think Sailor moon can do very very much more without darien by her side but that doesn't detract any from the story its just me ranting again.
It's like you and your fiction saw me coming a mile off...hooked is what I am...HOOKED i tells ye! in a good way. |
Reviewed By: Princess Aymei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2002 10:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh this is good. tell you how i found it then huh...well i was looking through the forum and I found your post and you referred to this story and stuff and i must say i like! the prolouge was really really good and it seems to promise amazing stuff to come. Gosh you're even better than I am and if the rest of it continues like this then it will be just perfect! Can't wait to see the other chapters now. ^____^
As for searching for a beta reader...hmm...good idea (it's just so hard to find one) but apart from a few (very few sentences that could have been worded differently i think it is perfect. Im getting a feel for the person narrating the story and its in their own kind of style.
(if you've got that beta reader already then stick to em ^__^)
The idea of the story I just love and i tell you i don't usually read stories of these kinds where 'so and so finds he/she has a sister' cause they seemed repetitive.
Great work. |
Reviewed By: Princess Aymei [MediaMiner Member] On: December 06, 2002 03:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this chapter if possible was even cooler! Its the insight to what magna guy (spelling eludes me) is really like...gosh he is some kind of evil! I mean how dare he! I don't like him none. Not at all. Can't wait till Fox is let loose...this is going to be sooo much fun. but seriously I have to go now...it's nine o clock in the morning (only had thirty minutes to do what I wanted see) gotta start a day of courseworks again.
Say...is this fiction up on fanfiction.net? |
