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| "Dragon Morphs: A Digimorphs Tale" Reviews/Comments [ 58 ] | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 13, 2003 19:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Or I at least could've shortened the story cut out! Author? Um... If u are thinking that because of the story modifacation that ur not gonna do any more and i should do them myself because u think that i think im so good... ur rong! I love them! i just couldn't resist just changing that one bit! | Reviewed By: DAR CY335 On: March 13, 2003 19:09 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OOPS! I WISH I JUST KEPT THE COMMENT TO MYSELF! | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 13, 2003 19:08 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm gonna read the story out loud! And do something to it! To make it just a
"1" little /font> different!
The original wording of chapter 3: Reunion:
"It's here Zoe." Sekata shoved some branches away to reveal a cave.
"Thanks."
The pair walked in and Sekata gestured for her to have a seat on a pile of palm leaves, used as a makeshift cushion. Sekata ran his claws along a stone, which produced some spark that he used to get a fire started.
The orange glow lit up the cave with a warm light, reflecting off the Cyberdramon's shinny armor as he sat down.
"Welcome to my den. It's not much, but make yourself at home."
Sekata's tone dampened slightly when he said the word 'home'. Zoe didn't know what was with her newfound friend, and certainly didn't want to hurt his feelings, but she had nothing to work with either.
"You...been here long, Sekata?"
Sekata brought his claw up to some scratch marks on the wall. He'd been keeping track of the time he'd spent here.
"Almost a month now." He said softly.
"By yourself?"
He nodded.
"I'm sorry. You must be pretty lonely."
"Don't worry about it." He put his smile back on. "I've gotten used to it. In a survival situation, it's tough to feel that way most of the time. By the way, I guess we should hear the rest of each other's stories."
"Yeah, well there's nothing much to mine. I bumped into this guy in a trench coat and he dropped some Digivices. I picked them up, gave two to Steve and Janet and we slashed some Digimon cards through." Zoe said, fingering with her Digivice. "Next thing we know, we're here and as Digimon. I was basically upset, flew off and crashed into you. You know the rest."
"Hold on. When did the man bump into you? The date I mean."
"Let's see. It was Sunday, 12th May."
"Odd, that's the same day someone bumped into me and dropped my Digivice too."
"You're kidding." Zoe gasped, looking up.
"It's like we activated our devices at the same time, but there was a time gap between your group and I entering this Digital World." Sekata contemplated.
"Now, that's really odd."
"Well, we can't do anything about it now." Sekata leaned back against the wall. "We should get some rest. It'll be dark soon, so we'll have to look for your friends in the morning."
"Hope Steve's OK." Zoe said, looking out of the cave. "Janet too."
"You're...really concerned about him?" Sekata looked up with interest. He was raising an eyebrow, through it was hidden beneath his mask.
"Who? Steve? No way! I think he actually likes Janet, just that he hasn't got the guts to tell her."
"I see." Sekata said, secretly breathing a sigh of relief.
"Steve's a lot like you. You know, sports and card games and stuff. And he's your typical wisecracker. Jan's sort of a computer person. She's actually quite short and Steve loves annoy her about that. And me, well I'm..."
"Screamy? Loud?"
"Hey!"
"Haha! And pretty good as a Digimon."
"Thanks. But not as good as you."
"It's tough." Sekata nodded. "I'm been living around this area trying to get the hang of my new form. I've been staying out of the way of most other Digimon. Those around here all seem to be dumb and nasty. And I have utterly no idea what my digestive system was designed for. I admit, I thought I was never going to be able to speak with another human being. Well, sort of."
"Heh, you're real cute, you know dragon-boy." Zoe laughed.
"So are you. And far more so than I. That XV-mon suits your true beauty perfectly." He smiled, moving closer, putting his left claw around her shoulder and taking her claw with his free one.
"You're just saying that." Zoe smiled. She wasn't making any attempt to move away. She looked like she was enjoying the warm, muscular grip of his hand.
Come on! You've got her now! The voices in his head screamed.
Don't loose this chance!
She's right where you want her to be!
Go! Go!
"I really mean it." He said, lowering his head.
Sekata felt Zoe grasping his arm more tightly. She was moving closer too.
That's it! In for the kill! Come on!
"That's real sweet." Zoe said, raising her head.
Their snouts were practically in front of each other.
Almost...almost...
BAM!
The pair gave a simultaneous yell of surprise and turned to see the strong wind had blown a broken tree limb against the entrance of the cave.
"Whew, that was a fright." Zoe muttered.
"Yeah..." Sekata nodded.
"Guess we should be getting some rest, Sekata."
"I...oh, yes definitely."
"Good night then. See you tomorrow."
Sekata nodded as Zoe lay down and rolled over to sleep. The Cyberdramon quickly turned away and was able to suppress his own scream of agony. (With the anime waterfall tears effect.)
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
And "MY" version of it!:
"It's here Zoe." Sekata shoved some branches away to reveal a cave.
"Thanks."
The pair walked in and Sekata gestured for her to have a seat on a pile of palm leaves, used as a makeshift cushion. Sekata ran his claws along a stone, which produced some spark that he used to get a fire started.
The orange glow lit up the cave with a warm light, reflecting off the Cyberdramon's shinny armor as he sat down.
"Welcome to my den. It's not much, but make yourself at home."
Sekata's tone dampened slightly when he said the word 'home'. Zoe didn't know what was with her newfound friend, and certainly didn't want to hurt his feelings, but she had nothing to work with either.
"You...been here long, Sekata?"
Sekata brought his claw up to some scratch marks on the wall. He'd been keeping track of the time he'd spent here.
"Almost a month now." He said softly.
"By yourself?"
He nodded.
"I'm sorry. You must be pretty lonely."
"Don't worry about it." He put his smile back on. "I've gotten used to it. In a survival situation, it's tough to feel that way most of the time. By the way, I guess we should hear the rest of each other's stories."
"Yeah, well there's nothing much to mine. I bumped into this guy in a trench coat and he dropped some Digivices. I picked them up, gave two to Steve and Janet and we slashed some Digimon cards through." Zoe said, fingering with her Digivice. "Next thing we know, we're here and as Digimon. I was basically upset, flew off and crashed into you. You know the rest."
"Hold on. When did the man bump into you? The date I mean."
"Let's see. It was Sunday, 12th May."
"Odd, that's the same day someone bumped into me and dropped my Digivice too."
"You're kidding." Zoe gasped, looking up.
"It's like we activated our devices at the same time, but there was a time gap between your group and I entering this Digital World." Sekata contemplated.
"Now, that's really odd."
"Well, we can't do anything about it now." Sekata leaned back against the wall. "We should get some rest. It'll be dark soon, so we'll have to look for your friends in the morning."
"Hope Steve's OK." Zoe said, looking out of the cave. "Janet too."
"You're...really concerned about him?" Sekata looked up with interest. He was raising an eyebrow, through it was hidden beneath his mask.
"Who? Steve? No way! I think he actually likes Janet, just that he hasn't got the guts to tell her."
"I see." Sekata said, secretly breathing a sigh of relief.
"Steve's a lot like you. You know, sports and card games and stuff. And he's your typical wisecracker. Jan's sort of a computer person. She's actually quite short and Steve loves annoy her about that. And me, well I'm..."
"Screamy? Loud?"
"Hey!"
"Haha! And pretty good as a Digimon."
"Thanks. But not as good as you."
"It's tough." Sekata nodded. "I'm been living around this area trying to get the hang of my new form. I've been staying out of the way of most other Digimon. Those around here all seem to be dumb and nasty. And I have utterly no idea what my digestive system was designed for. I admit, I thought I was never going to be able to speak with another human being. Well, sort of."
"Heh, you're real cute, you know dragon-boy." Zoe laughed.
"So are you. And far more so than I. That XV-mon suits your true beauty perfectly." He smiled, moving closer, putting his left claw around her shoulder and taking her claw with his free one.
"You're just saying that." Zoe smiled. She wasn't making any attempt to move away. She looked like she was enjoying the warm, muscular grip of his hand.
Come on! You've got her now! The voices in his head screamed.
Don't loose this chance!
She's right where you want her to be!
Go! Go!
"I really mean it." He said, lowering his head.
Sekata felt Zoe grasping his arm more tightly. She was moving closer too.
That's it! In for the kill! Come on!
"That's real sweet." Zoe said, raising her head.
Their snouts were practically in front of each other.
Almost...almost...
They were able to kiss for 1 second then...
BAM!
The pair gave a simultaneous yell of surprise and turned to see the strong wind had blown a broken tree limb against the entrance of the cave.
"Whew, that was a fright." Zoe muttered.
"Yeah..." Sekata nodded.
"Guess we should be getting some rest, Sekata."
"I...oh, yes definitely."
"Good night then. See you tomorrow."
Well... At least I felt all warm and fuzzy! This was my first kiss! Now it feels as though i LOVE her! Sekata thought to himself!
YYYYEEEESSSS!!!!
Ok... Auther of the story... technically it didnt count as being illegal! Because I Put my modifacation in the website I got it from! So..... It didn't count! Please Don't kick my head off! Waaaaah! I love the story! But i just HAD to make the modifacation! I loved their relationship so much that I just had to do it! | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 13, 2003 18:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaaaaaarrrrrrggggg! Darcy335 thinks! I just want that 16th chapter! | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 13, 2003 18:36 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS IS THE BEST STORY EVER! BUT... I'm WAITING! TICK TOCK TICK TOCK! IM TIMEMON! IN TEN MORE TICK TOCKS IM GONNA EXPLODE! LITTERALLY! TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK TICK TOCK! (Uses the same anime waterfalls technique used by Sekata when he wasn't able to kiss Zoe!) WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHH!!! Thinks Darcy335! | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 14, 2003 15:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Rotfl! Rotflol! Lol! Lmao! Oh... By the way... Do you think you can give me an eta of when the next chapter will be done? | Reviewed By: Darcy335 On: March 12, 2003 17:47 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THIS IS GREAT! I LOVE THIS STORY! YOU HAVE GOT TO FINISH IT! | Reviewed By: Renamon On: March 03, 2003 17:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
nice fis got got here, i just fininshed it, there are some errors on writing, spelling, grammer and all that gruff, also i hope you get around to continuing this fic | Reviewed By: shadow On: March 03, 2003 17:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome fic
really it a great job
go on | Reviewed By: Phoenix Hoshika [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2002 19:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your style is fine but you did mess up on the spelling and grammer just a little. Cool idea not using the anime characters. Overall your story was really good. I plan to review each chapter as I read it. | Reviewed By: Foxi-kun [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2002 11:07 CST
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GGGGGGGRRRRRRREEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!
This story has everything. It's funny, there is action but also love. Nice one. Keep going | Reviewed By: vulk90 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 14, 2002 22:46 CST
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make more! this is cool! | Reviewed By: Jay Man On: December 05, 2002 15:50 CST
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Uh oh I hope that attacks not aimed at her, I don't think she could take it. | Reviewed By: Jay Man On: December 03, 2002 19:05 CST
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Funny please write some more so I can see what happens | Reviewed By: nightdragon0 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 16, 2003 05:44 CST
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OK, I'm saying this in the most polite way possible, but please stop using the review system like a message board before the site adminstrators get angry. (And kindly don't post a bunch of messages again. Reviews are always morale boosting, but this isn't what I had in mind.)
To answer everything, I cannot promise updates because I'm busy in college and timing in quite unstable. I'm always writing here and there through. I'm honored you want to draw something for me, but just hang onto it until you can send it to me somehow.
Check my author page for any other updates. So do stop shoving messages into the review system. Thank you very much. | | Pages (4): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 ] |
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