Reviewed By: something like human [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2003 21:14 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Comment/Review:
i'm not doing this to be mean, you reviewed my fic asking for help!
so far, you have no plot. you haven't done or said anything of any importance and failed to draw the reader into what plot will eventually develop. i understand that it is just a prologue but usually a prologue gives a sneek peak into what's going to happen. as far as i can tell, nothing is going to happen. you should expand the prologue to pique the readers' interest.
i'm sorry if i offended you, that was not my intent. i just want to help! email or im me if you would like.
ja!
~something like human |
