Reviewed By: Somebody Else [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2003 23:39 CST
Comment/Review:
I thought it was all just a bit out of charicter... but I suppose that the time passing can account for that.
I think the story would be better told with flashbacks or something... it seems sort of wierd, the way Juri is telling Takato what he did... just the littlest bit awkward.
Also, I don't know if this could really be called a "friendship fic" since they weren't really friends anymore.
Other than that, Takato being a drunken idiot is a pretty original plot, and you have good grammer and spelling. ^_^ It's a good fic! |
