| "On The Line" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: HaXx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 22, 2003 21:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ah hah so Starfox reveiwed you. I'm surprised he kept his sanity.
I agree the grammar needs' work but the story is Excellent. you have grabbed the charcters personality's very well. Kudo's to you buddy
Oh and if you are confused by two people reveiwing the other guy is Starfox 319 my writing comrade.
Lil'Devil you'd perfer Ryo and Rika? you are worse than Starfox |
Reviewed By: HaXx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2003 19:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
The only thing that's annoy'sd me is you've got the same pairing as i do (H+R) oh well (it had to happen some time), mine comes about a differnet way. your originality deseves a note too!
good story descripton and no stupid stuff, but improve the grammar and i'd give you 9-10 everything! |
Reviewed By: EXV_Asia On: June 23, 2003 12:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like it. Your story is not like others; it's original. It's believable. Keep up the good work! |
Reviewed By: Lil'Devil On: April 17, 2003 11:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
I haven't read it yet but, IT'S SUPPOSED TO BE RYO AND RIKA,NOT HENRY AND RIKA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
Reviewed By: xtreemmasheen3k2 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2003 01:25 CST
Comment/Review:
I'm just so glad this isn't another Yaoi (or from what i've read, not yet). I hate yaoi fanfics. |
Reviewed By: Somebody Else [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2003 17:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hm... you could use some work on the grammer. It makes it a little hard to concentrate on the story. Other than that, you're doing great! Don't take it personally that you aren't getting that many hits, it's just because the majority of people on this site are only interested in porno. ~_^
~Somebody Else |
