| "Wages of Sin" Reviews/Comments [ 24 ] |
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Title: ch.3
Reviewed By: LS On: September 01, 2003 02:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
*Whew* That was hmmmm very nice...very feverish hmmm. I am so glad to finally be able to read this new chapter...I think I'm gonna go read it again ha! After his teasing w/ holding her arms...I like when he moans into her shoulder...serves him right *^_~* I look forward to reading how this story continues to unfold...Nice chapter. {I like the visual w/ the light from the lamp shining into his eyes (as he is surprised by it)...and his shirtless figure--it's very easy to see that moment...and see it from her perspective...as her own eyes adjust *^_^*} |
Reviewed By: dragonzmoon [MediaMiner Member] On: August 20, 2003 12:33 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey, great B/V action in ch.four! Geta's a smooth worker. Great orginal storyline, I love it already. UPDATE PLEASE!!!!! |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: August 13, 2003 10:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, Ku, I'm hesitant to say it was worth the wait (even though it was), because I don't want to have to wait another six months for the next installment! ;)
The lemon was scrumptious!!! :D I look forward to the morning after reactions... |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: August 08, 2003 05:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
Woo!!! A nice lil lemon!! :D And it only took you six months... You make me look like the most dilligent updater ever... : D
Nice chapter - hurry up with the next one!! (Or 'Dragon' ... Saiyans in armour... Ohhhhhh) |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 On: August 07, 2003 20:10 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whew! Nice Lemon! Can't wait to find out what happens on the morning after! |
Reviewed By: christabeleve On: August 06, 2003 19:29 CDT
Comment/Review:
couch or bed, its lemon all the way |
Reviewed By: Bardockgurl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 26, 2003 17:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! UPDATE!!!!!!! PLEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!!!!!!! :D (The copy and paste Queen strikes again!!!) |
Reviewed By: princess On: February 09, 2003 06:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm looking forward to read ch.3! Keep up the good work ^o^ |
Reviewed By: Abby On: February 10, 2003 17:41 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like the way this going! PLease continue to write! |
Reviewed By: Puar On: February 05, 2003 21:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Mmm very intriguing. I'm waiting around for the third chapter. Get to it hippy. :) |
Reviewed By: Susan On: February 04, 2003 18:50 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great update! So it's the dragonballs that they're after...can't wait to see what's gonna happen next ^_^. Veggie is such a sly fox, already putting the moves on Bulma ^_~. |
Reviewed By: tristar49 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 21:42 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is turning out to be a great story |
Reviewed By: LS On: February 02, 2003 21:39 CST
Comment/Review:
I like when she first sees his dark eyes...very effective hmmmm ^_~...and I love when he says "Maybe I don't want to." {my knees go weak too ha! *^_^*}...Great chapter, I am enjoying this story! |
Reviewed By: phantomscribe72 On: February 02, 2003 21:37 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmmmm...so this is all about the dragonball, huh? I'm hooked for sure now! |
Reviewed By: MelizaMac [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 20:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh, Ku, it's only Chapter 2 and I'm already hooked! It sounds like this fic is going to be jam-packed with intrigue, action, lots of smoldering looks between Bulma and Vegeta (hopefully more than just looks, ok?) and lots of mystery and excitement.
What a neat idea to pull the DBZ gang into a Bonnie and Clyde-like story. I can't wait to see where it all heads next. |
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