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| "Black Dragon Empress" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] | Reviewed By: xtreemmasheen3k2 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2003 21:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
well, the prologue kinda got me hooked into it, except one thing. In duels, it's really fast if you use 3 Thunder Dragons in your deck, because after you discard one from your hand by putting it into the graveyard, you can search your deck for 2 more and put it into your hand. Heh, yeah, ol' Jounouchi acting like his own conceited self as usual. You really were acurately able to portray his character and other characters. On to chapter 1.
*reads chapter 1*
heh, start of another duel. But one thing, who actually uses Flower Wolf? I mean, seriously. on the chapter 2
*reads chapter 2*
It would help if you put a lifepoint counter on future duels. Also, Salamandra would have raised Flame Swordsman's attack to 2500, making it when he attacked Riley's Blood Vors (english: Vorse Raider) to inflict 600, no 300 points of damage on her lifepoints, making it 1400 to 1100 i believe, with Riley winning. Heh, she beat him down. However, i don't think you gave Jounouchi-kun a good enough of a chance. I mean, you didn't even have him use any trap cards. And i expect you're doing it using Duelist Kingdom rules, because anyone with 3 Red Eyes, and 2 Thunder Dragons really wouldn't have made it far in Battle City. Anyways, an okay fic, just not realistic "yugioh" in my opinion. But realistic enough to make it enjoyable. | Reviewed By: Winged Master [MediaMiner Member] On: February 05, 2003 16:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought there was some strong writing.
there is definetly some potential to this story.
Have joey's ass handed to him.
Caio,
WM | Reviewed By: lili_30 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 17:51 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great ficcy! Have Anzu and Yami play a big part in this ficcy! I like the pairing of Anzu/Yami, and I also like Anzu/Seto pairings. Anyway, will Riley (OC) play a really big role in this fic, because it seems that way from what I've read. Anyways, this ficcy seems really interesting. Update soon please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ^_^ | Reviewed By: Millenia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 02, 2003 13:24 CST
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Oh Joey is in trouble! hehe. I can't wait for the next chappy! ^^ | Reviewed By: Yami/ Anzu fan On: February 01, 2003 19:04 CST
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I agree, please write more....I beg you, but please make Yami/ Anzu couple stand out, the OC not bothering Yami/ Anzu couple as well make the couple have large roles as 'Someday....' says, make your fic as good as you made.
So long, until you write the other chapters for the story, hopefully using my comments....
* runs away * | Reviewed By: Someday.... On: February 01, 2003 19:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey!!! I really liked your story..sorry I mean...LOVE YOUR STORY!!! Please wrote more...please.
I'm a totally Yami/ Anzu couple romance fan!!!
In the chapters you write...please show that couple. I just love them!!!
Make Anzu ( english name Tea ) have a huge role as well as Yami in the story. The OC can not bother Yami's relationship with Tea...but I agree you just have to write more!!!!
I have a feeling your fanfic will be the best !! | Reviewed By: Millenia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 01, 2003 10:36 CST
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I agree with Tea Fan! PLEZZZZZZZ make more! | Reviewed By: Tea Fan On: January 31, 2003 20:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yes, please make more. My only question is, will Tea have a big part in this story? Or will the romance be merely be a by product of what the OC does? Will the OC play a big part? Or will she just be "part" of the larger scheme between Tea and Yami. Either way, I think you're doing great. The story was nicely written with few grammar errors and nicely detailed. Please continue and I'll review again! ^_^ |
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