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| "She's Who? (possible revision)" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Kala On: March 12, 2003 04:20 CST
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nice. what for a lovely idea. i hope goku and his new wife have later one a child. that i would like to see. | Reviewed By: Lauryn S. On: February 20, 2003 11:09 CST
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Hey, what should i do. I only like your story and i know you are busy with your children. You have comment(no it is not the right word, but i am sure you know what i am mean) it once. And i know how it is with children. Okay, i have not ones by myself, but i am hooked with my too little brothers all by myself. | Reviewed By: Son Ichigo On: February 17, 2003 15:32 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
it is good enough, but could you bring in more of the pov from that girl. what would she thinking about her wedding to goku. after all he is a stranger for her and she for him. that she is married to a would champion and protector of earth, saiyajins, gokus two sons, bluma, vegeta, trunks and so on.
how would goku and chichi, mostly chichi handle this new addition to her familiy.
we is goku going to treat her as a daughter, sister or really as his second wife with all that comes with it: sex, more kids, protecting her and so on. | Reviewed By: Nijin On: February 09, 2003 12:53 CST
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Who had told you that it is bad or worse. Why should it be? They had told you that are idiots. maybe they don't like only the concept of one men and one woman. but thats nuts. there are so much other cultures the handle the whole thing other.
but there is noting bad with this fanfiction. i hope you don't dare cutting of writing this one and let us hanging.
i have seem is on fanfiction.net too, but i am lousy with writing in english. reading and speaking do i like i have grown up with the language. that is wy i am don't review very often. but here i see they need to do it to let you know i like it and it is great. to my knowledge the review the writers here get are much fewer than at ff.net, but that not means you have writing a bad fanfiction. | Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2003 14:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, really great actually! I hope you add more, I love the way you wrote it. |
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