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| "A New Girl" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] | Title: Please read
Reviewed By: midgetmaid2001 On: February 16, 2004 19:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
To whom it may concern, I read your story, and all I can say is-BRAVO! It is one of the best writings I have read in a long time. Please take this as a warm-hearted compliment from me. I usually never writed a reveiw for anyone unless their story really touches my heart in some way. And with that, I give you my condolsions. I wish you to write me some time, and reply back from my review. My e-mail adress is midgetmaid2001@yahoo.com Don't hesitate to write me. I check my mail everyday. Sincerelly, midgetmaid2001
| Reviewed By: G-sell On: April 04, 2003 19:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
tHAT WAS SOOOOOOOOOOOO CUTE!!!!!!!!!!!!hERE'S A SUGGESTION MAYBE YOU CAN WRITE A PART 2 WITH MOKUBA AND BLAIR ALL GROWED UP!!!!! | Reviewed By: YugiGirl On: March 24, 2003 20:12 CST
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Great Job! I must say that Chapter 12 was very sad. You did a good job of the emotions. Also, I'd sorta like to say that at the very end, Don't you think "I love you" are too strong of words for 11-12 year olds? I think it would but who knows.. Check your email, i'm going to write more too you...Don't wanna take up to much space here. | Reviewed By: Jasmine On: March 24, 2003 17:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is so good! I hope you tell what happends after. I wonder what will happen to them when they are teenagers. | Reviewed By: calupe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2003 17:37 CST
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GREAT JOB, GIRL! Check your email, I, uh...sent you a long email...lol. ^_^ Keep it up! | Reviewed By: calupe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2003 14:29 CST
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Hey, thanks a ton for changing the font *:) Sorry to nitpick...but uh... why is the mom acting like a kid? She really seems like it, wanting to go the arcade a junk...oh, she was just kidding...got it. Ok, well, I don't think she would be so all up in their business... I mean, she probably wouldn't go right ahead and ask Mokuba if he liked Blair... and if I were them I'd stay as far as possible from my mom...but maybe that's just me. I like your chapter 10 ending too- why is it such a bad thing? plz post more! | Reviewed By: calupe [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2003 16:10 CST
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No offense or anything, but are you even thirteen yet? If you aren't, your writing is good for your age. However old you are, your story has an original protagonist. A few tips: Blair is kind of loud and annoying and it's hard for me to imagine someone like her. Also, in the beginning, when she was meeting everyone else, she had these mood swings. First she was so annoyed with these people who thought she couldn't read and then she was all ready to make friends, but that's not really a big deal. Number Two: This is just a personal thing- The Comic Sans is a little hard on the eyes...(^_^...yeah it's just me, I guess) and one more: I am also a Seto girl and he doesn't really fit the personality you've given him. In fanfics, you can alter them a little, but not to the point where Seto Kaiba's bursting out laughing, and Mokuba never smiles. Mokuba smiles all the time! Sooo...you might want to keep them just a little closer to home. I hope you don't hate me for my constructive critism! It really is a good piece of work, keep it up! | Reviewed By: petite_angel [MediaMiner Member] On: March 14, 2003 21:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You're ficcie's pretty cool. I like your character Blair and her mom too. I thought it was hilarious when her mom started whispering stuff about how Mokuba was cute in Blair's ear. MUCHA FUNNY! | Reviewed By: YugiGirl On: March 16, 2003 19:14 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Ahhh!! I wrote you a review and then my computer cut me off, so I don't know if it reached you but I think I gotta write it all over. Ok, here goes: I love you fiction!! Mokuba is the cutest guy ever and the best thing to write about. I was going to write a fiction like that too, but now that I found out you already wrote one, then there's no point now. But your ficiton is VERY cute. I must make a suggestion...(not to offend you or anything) but I'm a Seto Kaiba fan, and the Seto Kaiba in your story doesn't quite fit the personality of the real Kaiba. I mean, try to imagine Kaiba bursting out laughing. It's odd ain't it? BUT the story is still very good, so yeah... KEEP ON WRITING! | Reviewed By: YugiGirl On: March 16, 2003 19:19 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Ahhh!! I wrote you a review and then my computer cut me off, so I don't know if it reached you but I think I gotta write it all over. Ok, here goes: I love you fiction!! Mokuba is the cutest guy ever and the best thing to write about. I was going to write a fiction like that too, but now that I found out you already wrote one, then there's no point now. But your ficiton is VERY cute. I must make a suggestion...(not to offend you or anything) but I'm a Seto Kaiba fan, and the Seto Kaiba in your story doesn't quite fit the personality of the real Kaiba. I mean, try to imagine Kaiba bursting out laughing. It's odd ain't it? BUT the story is still very good, so yeah... KEEP ON WRITING! | Reviewed By: YugiGirl On: March 16, 2003 19:23 CST
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Stupid computer, eh? Didn't show you my first comment, but shows TWO of the second one. Aiyaaa... Sorry bout that |
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