| "Take My Memories Away" Reviews/Comments [ 33 ] |
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Reviewed By: Crimson Shadow On: March 17, 2003 14:20 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Whoa I have to agree that this is a very angsty original and intriguing story. I want another chapter NOW! Okay I am serious but in a nice way. Yohji OOC doesn't bother me though normally it would but if he is becoming the persona Black Leopard then I cant wait to see him in his new team. Keep it coming
Crimson |
Reviewed By: silvertoekee [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2003 04:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
whoa talk about a angsty and pain filled chapter. this is a very original and interesting story. can't wait for the next chapter to come out! |
Reviewed By: neko-chan On: March 20, 2003 00:33 CST
Comment/Review:
wow. great fic! um, couple of things you should work on - your tenses get mixed up, stick with I or He for the whole fic (or charecter). also, you might want to work on your grammar; a new sentance for every new idea! other than that, your spelling and word use are great, and the plot is fantastic! please continue with this! soon...? |
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