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Reviewed By: Ryuuka On: April 01, 2003 11:07 CST
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Yah! You're back! And with more fanfic goodness! I'm very happy. This story is on an awesome start, keep it going! I just fear for Ryou. He's going to have evil growing in him but he loves his child anyway! Ohhh...the poor guy.... |
Reviewed By: Dragondreamer Yami Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 01, 2003 10:32 CST
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*hauls out industerial sized box of tissue* Damn you cutiegirl! *blows nose* |
Reviewed By: ssjgoddessChico [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2003 22:58 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Interesting title for the chapter. It fits it perfectly! Poor Ryou is gonna be a girl.....It's gonna be sooooo funny how Bakura deals with Ryou's craving for weird food. And I cannot wait to see Anzu's reaction!!! |
Reviewed By: A.M.T On: March 31, 2003 22:30 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
When is he turning into a girl?
Bakura:O_oI still can't believe I'm a dad.
Deal with it!^___________^I posted a new story!Its called The Weirdest Couple Ever!(Its on ff.net)Its humor.And very funny by the way.
Ryou:Wow!You actually put me in here!
Sorry.;_;
Ryou:*hugs*Its OK.Write more,live well,and play games!^_______^ |
Reviewed By: Kitty-chan On: March 31, 2003 22:19 CST
Rating(s):Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
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^_^ I'm FINALLY reviewing! It's been so long since you started to write Nanny Bakura (yes, I've been with you for that long... you just never knew it) and your writing has improved.
I love your pairings, but I think there is too much mushyness. Don't get me wrong, I LOVE mushyness, but too much and you can get sick of it. I don't want to stop reading your fic just because there is lots of mushyness. Like every two sentences there is the word kiss or something implying that or something like that. It gets kinda annoying.
I'm starting to think Bakura is a really weak guy. I think his love for his hikari is starting to weaken him. I think that of Malik too. In the Fall of Icarus, Cinetti actually hit Bakura (I think. My mind has a few holes in it here or there...). I thought Bakura was agile enough to dodge those punches. After all, he has been a tomb robber before and probably had to escape from all those traps that lay hidden withen a tomb or escaped someone who tried to capture him.
I love your fic cuz while they include lemons, they actually include a plot. *gasps* I never thought that was possible! But on your lemons, you write "Malik" instead of "Marik" or vise versa, so it sometimes gets a bit too confusing. I usually don't like lemons that much cuz it's just the same thing over and over and over again and I can predict everything that's gonna happen. But you lemons have "emotions", so to speak. But I still don't like lemons too much, but I love your plot!
Some typos like "intoa" or something else without a space. I find that constantly (well, your normal fic has 30-50^ chapters, but even those little errors that pop up ever couple chapters are annoying, ESPECIALLY during lemons, which I still don't like, but read anyways..). But I shouldn't be talking (typing actually) because I am a horrible writer and probably have at least three mistakes in this review, but I love to make fun of people who have typos like :
Will Yugi's friends except him for who he really is? (It is 'accepts' you moron!) ^ someone did that, just not the same words around that.
There friends act like jerks. (wrong use of 'there'. People constantly confuses that)
To much of anything can't be to good for you. (TOO)
Your such a baka sometimes. (YOU ARE)
(Wow. I really get off topic)
Anywayz, keep up the good work and continue to write!
~Kitty-chan |
Reviewed By: GRALNAK, The Lord of Chaos [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2003 21:35 CST
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so is this where you are going to use my idea?
I like anubis, he da man wit da plan......well sorta....in a evil sense.......much better character than steven.......just my op.
:)gralnak
ch.8 of undying light soon.......anzu will be bashed one last time....hehehe............... |
Reviewed By: GRALNAK, The Lord of Chaos [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2003 21:29 CST
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Huzzah!!
sorry I have not reviewed for a while....:(
I LOVE CH.2 !!!!!
funny!!!
FRIENDSHIP IS LIKE ANUBIS!!!
:)gralnak
will review next chappies |
Reviewed By: NegaCat On: March 31, 2003 18:03 CST
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ARGH!!! I HATE MY COMPUTER!!! IT WOULN'T LOAD THE STUPID SITE!!!!!!! ARGH!!!!!! Ok, now... WHY?! Why poor little Ryou? *sniffle* This guy's never gonna have a normal life. I just love these stories! As lon as the bad guys suffer for the evilness they cause poor little Ryou! And Malik, please don't hurt my Malik too much. He's too cute/hot/sexy to be in pain! Ok, praise time ^-^ I'm sorry I haven't reviewed for a while. I feel pretty bad. My computer wouldn't load the site. You ended the last story beautifully, and this one looks like it'll be good! More chances for me too express my hate for Cinetti ^-^ Cinetti and Anzu bashing NEVER get old. Especially the way you bash her! The fire hydrant and killer-bee hive one's are my favorites ^-^ Keep up all the good work! I'll review whenever my idiot computer loads the site, count on it! Once again, I'm so sorry. I think this long one should make up for all the missed reviews though, I'll read the next chappie when it gets up ^-~ |
Reviewed By: Mononoke [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2003 15:29 CST
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This Millenium Marasume, what does it do? Oh, and sorry you don't like my frying pan, but they took away all my tourture devices. This is why you shouldn't threaten the principle with death by fire. ... Oh well, Good chappie! ^__^ |
Reviewed By: Dragondreamer Yami Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 31, 2003 07:16 CST
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aawww...man! I can't believe you left it there! Are you trying to kill me or something? *cries* Am I going to have to buy a jumbo box of tissues for this one too? Geeze cutiegirl! |
Reviewed By: Tiamat On: March 31, 2003 05:19 CST
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Hehe to bad the baddies dont know that the baby is going to be a good "guy" in the end :P
hehe still think it would be fun to have Marik as the other blood daddy it would be fun to see a little mini crazy Marik :P
I like to say blood daddy because I think that all four are going to be the fathers (well 3 since Ryou is kind of the mother) and in this relationship no matter who made the child they are all going to love the kids equally as if they were their own flesh and blood. |
Reviewed By: hotaruchan27 On: March 30, 2003 19:23 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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*rolling on the floor laughing her ass off* "Concussions are like friendship!" God that is just sooo funny!
Tigerlily: Then lets give her plenty of friendship, shall we? *yells up to Malik & Marik* Okay boys, get ready to let them all go!
Anzu: Yeah Friendship! *20 boulders fall on her head*
Tigerlily: "Concussions are like friendship!" Yeah Torture!
Gotta say, I think Marik really needs some nookie soon. He's sounding sooo cranky. I had a thought earlier while I was eating my ice cream about Ryou's pregnancy. Are you gonna give him strange cravings? I think it'd be funny sending Bakura out at 2 am because he wants pistachio ice cream with dill pickles. Or worse fried pickles (yes I actually saw that for sale once. ewwwww) and liver. Mood swings, strange cravings and maybe Marik having a sympathetic pregnancy with him (for the attention he misses and needs) would be sooo funny. |
Reviewed By: Berrieberrie [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2003 18:54 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well this was intersting. You have a wonderful writting gift. Too bad I can't write like that. But anyway this is a Great way to start a continuation!! |
Reviewed By: lupusdragon [MediaMiner Member] On: March 30, 2003 18:19 CST
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LD: hey Bakurasgirl, I just read chappies 3 & 4 at adultfanfiction.net and I must say that I just love crazy Marik!
Karen: he hurt Malik, you wench, how could you like that?
LD: I just do, Ok. the point was that I am happy that I don't have to wait until tomorrow to meet the villians!!
Karen: You already knew who the were...
LD: yes, but the plot thickens!
Karen: you are so stupid. Fall of Icarus was not updated as frequently there as it was here, so why would Baby of mine be any different? You do realize that by reading ahead at the other site, you are probably going to have to wait three days for the lemon?
LD: NOOOO
Karen ^-^ hehe, I am so bad! |
Reviewed By: EscaChick On: March 30, 2003 17:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooooh! So good, as usual! You definitely have talent! ^____^ I'm very happy that Ryou-sama is okay. I feel bad for Bakura though, having to go through all of the pain of almost losing his lover. I'd be sad too! **sniffle**
I started crying when Ryou kept on saying he didn't want to die. **sniffle**
Oh, I have present! **hands bakurasgirl Ryou and Bakura kiss-kiss plushys** Heeheehee. I've got my own kiss-kiss plushys, so don't worry. ^___^
Can't wait for next chapter. Hurry up! I need to cry some more! ^_____^
And my mother told me the craziest thing ever! I was bawling like crazy because I was watching Yami no Matsuei and yeah... she came up to me and hugged me by my shoulders and said "You can cry all you wish. A woman's day isn't complete unless she cries a little bit." I love my mom, she makes me feel better all the time because of all the crazy stuff she says. But to tell the truth I'm beginning to believe her. Hehehe... I hope Bakura can hang in there with all of Ryou's moodswings.
Ooooh! I love kids! I bet they're going to look just as CYYUUUUUTE AND SWEET AND DID I MENTION CYYYUUUUUTE AS RYOU AND BAKURA!!!!
YEAH ROMANCE!
EscaChick |
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