| "ODDDDDDDD COUPLES" Reviews/Comments [ 12 ] |
Reviewed By: SonSofia [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2007 00:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 2 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
That really want odd at all. I have already produce a Trunks and Goku fic before and it is not odd, just rare. And the moment at the end? Terrible. Don't do it again. And I noticed you never used any other words other than dick and member. So you're one of those. Broaden your grammar and make the story longer, more detail, and please fix those horrible mistakes! In any case, nice try.
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Reviewed By: hikaru maxwell [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2005 15:19 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not only is your grammar atrocious, and your flow downright disturbing, the only odd thing about this couple is the badly inserted incest moment at the end. please rewrite it (with a better pairing and without the incest, please), and maybe the overall opinion of your work will improve.
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Reviewed By: Forlorn Dragon [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2004 16:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is just plain bad. The fic went way too fast and there was no point to any of it. You need to work on your writing skills. Seriously. I almost never give out a bad review. I am usualy very generous. keep trying though. they say practce makes perfect.
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Title: um that was interesting
Reviewed By: AnimeALLday [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2003 22:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
i gotta say dont listen to the critisms the other reviewers are giving you i thoughti was good. of course (probably cause i do the same) oh and what's his name ....doggyfiz,he's harsh and a jerk i kind of admit that was oddddddddd the title said it all,but you should have put more and conitnue.okay bye!
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Reviewed By: SSJ Ryoko [MediaMiner Member] On: October 24, 2003 21:16 CDT
Comment/Review:
uh....it waz okay i guess. u should make it longer or maybe hentai's just not ur thing
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Reviewed By: doggy fiz On: July 12, 2003 22:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
this sucked learn to write u pathitic person take some writting classes 4 peats sake i dont think ne one liked this u freak a$$ whore! i would give u a 0-10 but they dont have that |
Reviewed By: goergina On: July 12, 2003 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good who will be next chichi and bulma or vegeta and goku or gohan and gotin him i wonder |
Reviewed By: slayer77 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 11:51 CST
Comment/Review:
okay, they were pretty odd, if you search fanfics for dragon ball z, there aren't that many with trunks and goku AND goten, i might make one for bulma plus ????? later, or just do a yugioh one |
Reviewed By: methakamon [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 09:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a good fanfic however its a little short but at least it cuts down to the chase. But i dont like the part where goten comes in. |
Reviewed By: Kaze [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 09:11 CST
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That was really awful. You need to put PWP on your summary. Not only that, but it was rushed, not an odd couple, badly written and just generally bad. Grammar and spelling was poor, it was hard to read. The bit with Goten at the end? NO
I suggest you revise your writing before you go on to write another fic like this. |
Reviewed By: me On: April 04, 2003 04:05 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't think Trunks and Goku qualifies as an odd couple. But it's uaually Mirai Trunks that gets paired with Goku and not chibi Trunks who I assume is in this story. Not only was this story hard to read because of lack of spacing, etc. But it was pretty much just straight up porn. It largely lacks any kind of plot or charcter development. The ages are not specified but I am hoping that Trunks and Goten are not children. And the instant incest at the end with Goten and Goku was simply silly. It would be better for you to aim for some sort of plot and incorporate "odd" couples into it. Although almost any reasonable yaoi couple you can think of has most likely been done. |
Reviewed By: slayer77 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 04, 2003 00:44 CST
Comment/Review:
someone review, please! |
