| "There's Always Hope" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 13:18 CDT
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Alright! Go kick ass you guys!
Update soon please. |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 13:14 CDT
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Yeah! Kakarott found his mum. But that teacher has such a rod-up-the-ass attitude towards the Saiyans.
Anyways, I'm gonna read on. |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 13:07 CDT
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That was so sweet.
Damn you Frieza! Burn in hell or something like that.
I'm gonna read chappie 5 now. Maybe it'll be entertaining. Does Kakarott find his brother or something. Only one way to find out. |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 13:00 CDT
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So how does Vegeta know Goku? I wanna find out...
... wait...
...there's the next chapter there already...
...WOOOOOHOOOOOOOOO.....
....guess who's gonna go read it.
(me incase anyone didn't know) |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 12:57 CDT
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Aw. That was so sweet. At least Master Roshi isn't an asshole like Krillin's father. He's been so nice to the two boys. Nice to see that not everyone is a jerk. |
Reviewed By: dragonheart287 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 01, 2003 12:53 CDT
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Good start. But how can that guy mistreat his own son? His is a butt I would truely like to kick. This sounds kinda like the fic I'm doing with the shock collar and all. But, Ipromise, I discovered this fic after I stated it. The only simulartity I can see so far is the collars. I've got them grown up and its a Vegeta/Radditz thing.
Anyway, good start. |
Reviewed By: Sakiku [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2003 14:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I think you've got a really, really great idea there! But it would enjoy this story even more if you didn't move with the plot so fast.
You barely give any descriptions except for the most necessary ones, and I can't really connect with the characters as you give too little insight into their motives, their feelings, their thoughts (in my opinion). I do get the general impression, but it is no study in depth where I could REALLY identify myself with a character. It would add the little bit something to your story that makes a reader so captivated that he can't stop any more.
In my opinion, those insights are very important and can't be compensated by a great plot line completely , but you are awfully close to proving this opinion of mine wrong.
P. S.: if you think that 8 out of 10 means that I gave you a bad grade for your writing style then I have to correct you. 8 out of 10 means really good to me, but not as good as it could be. It is just that I reserve 10 out of 10 for very outstanding achievments, and your story is really very, very, very original and crative. |
Reviewed By: VampireGoddess [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2003 21:07 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well so far I believe this story is by far a must read. ^_^
I think its very well written and detailed, you are doin an amazingly amazing job. Please keep up the great work.
Also I hope you update as soon as you can because perhaps more people with review his really great fic. ^_^
P.S. Don't pay attention to those idiots that don't review, think of it this way, for those that did't review it is because they can't find words great enough to describe your genius work ^_-. Thats how I think of it when people don't review my work. Lol, but perhaps I am just crazy. Keep writing and keep creating ^_^ |
