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"The Beauty of You" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ]
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2003 00:17 CDT Rating(s): Style of Writing: 5 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10 Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review: This fanfiction is quite problematical to follow but it did make sense here and there. What are you trying to say when love wasn't on Squall's mind? What was he really thinking about other than Quistis or whatever he saw? I noticed that your sentences keep on going sometimes. If you have complex sentence you could just break it into two short sentences. It makes it easier to follow if you want to pause all the time. If you go off on a tangent then you'll quickly lose your audience. It's out of the ordinary but if you enhance your skills well enough it will be more then just out of the ordinary.
Reviewed By: Darkened Chivalry [MediaMiner Member] On: April 23, 2003 05:57 CDT Rating(s): Style of Writing: 10 of 10 Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10 Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10 Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10 Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review: That was great like i knew it would be, I like angst Squall, and his not quite "in" love reltionship with Q, they allways did have a thing between them which was never really exployed, she was better for him that Rinoa ever was, Rinoa was far to ditsy, Love It.

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