| "Sorceress's Song" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Kurama13 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2004 19:41 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Cool story. Love it. Can't wait for more.
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Reviewed By: Piccolo'sVampire Princess [MediaMiner Member] On: July 23, 2003 01:04 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A mary-sue is a story that has a character you created or based on you.the character in question dosn't have to be 'perfect'(but i've only read one with a character that was fat but lost all the wieght training till she was pretty) but most of the time ,no all the time 's'he hooks up with one character and they fall hopelessly in love with them some time author will go so for as to make several characters fall for 'him/her'.But usally a
mary-sue is a story were an author models a character after themselves the throws themsevles in to the timeline of the story and a character falls in love with the and they basiclly have a perfect life. |
Reviewed By: lysel [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2003 14:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
its cool story. please update so |
Reviewed By: Meg On: July 08, 2003 20:18 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I thought your story was good. The spelling was good, and you did a nice job with the emotions of the characters. One way you could improve future chapters is to work on your paragraphs; you should start a new paragraph each time someone speaks, or when a new event occurs. That would make it a little easier to read.
A Mary Sue is an original character that is more or less perfect. She doesn't have to be a self-insert, although often she is. Basically, Mary Sues at the extreme are flawless, beautiful to the point of being physically impossible, and inspire every guy for miles around to fall hopelessly in love. They're what every girl wishes she was, but no girl actually is. I don't think Libby is a Mary Sue yet, but as OCs tend to be Mary Sues I would make sure that you make sure she stays real and believable.
I hope this review didn't come out as sounding overly critical, because I think your story has a lot of potential. Good job! |
