Reviewed By: Xi Yan On: July 08, 2003 12:42 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok... I gave your style an eight, because you seem to have an overall plot established, although, it's slightly choppy and needs a little bit more continuity to it. I gave your spelling and grammar a five. Your spelling is up to par, but I keep finding comma splices, and missing punctuation about every other line.
I haven't found a story like this one yet, so I'm giving it a ten for originality and creativity. I gave it a ten for enjoyment. It was a good chapter, despite the lack of punctuation and the choppiness. Overall, it was a nicely written fic.
A word of advice, make sure that you know where you're going with the plot. Don't write yourself into a corner, because it's hard to get out of it afterward. I would know, I've been there and done that. If you have a new idea for your story, try writing out the chapter on paper first, and incorporate it there. If it doesn't look right, you can always omit something, or fix it before you get the whole thing written that way. But make sure you don't take out anything that pertains to the original plot.
If you haven't written out a plot line yet, or at least, a rough outline, you should probably do so. That way, if you forget what you want to happen in a particular chapter, you can always look back and refresh your memory.
I don't write much fanfiction anymore, but I write short stories for a monthly paper. This is the method I work by, and it seems to work fairly well for me.
Well, that's enough of my advice. Please, keep up the good work! You're doing a great job!
Sincerely,
Xi Yan Lin |
