| "Mousse Muad Dib" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: OkamiGS On: July 25, 2003 20:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 3 of 10 Comment/Review:
Although you write well, and I have no idea why my review didn't go on ff.net but this story has nothing to do with Dune. Stilgar does not know the voice it's a Bene Gesserit learned trait. Mousse would need years of practice to get it right since it needs a different pitch for everyone.
None of the characters if they even can be said to resemble the originals act the way they should. Considering Stilgar would much rather die that see water used as it was being used it a good example. Another is that he is not wearing a stillsuit something fremen do for almost all their lives.
Paul, Mousse's supposed father had only 3 children before he went blind and after that no woman would have dared touch him. The only person he had children with was Chani and she died giving birth to his twins.
Either read the books and fix the characters or just make new names for them and make an original fusion. After reading some of the GREAT reviews you had on ff.net I felt like throwing up. It's a cheap rip off of a good book/movies. I think it's similar to having an original perfect character come in and solve everyone's problem fic.
In other words it's not worthing read as it is now. |
Reviewed By: Kinai [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2003 13:53 CDT
Comment/Review:
DUNE????? You made a crossover with DUNE??? Ok i have to see this one.
Kinai.
P.D: I like Dune so i expect that you made a good crossover from a great novel. |
Reviewed By: saber918 On: July 19, 2003 21:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
I cant belive you crossed over with dune. And made Mu-tzu the voice from the off world that is just horrible. Other than that its well written.
but thats just me. |
