| "The Way My Life Was Supposed To Be" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: See through your chapters...
Reviewed By: Hiryo [MediaMiner Member] On: July 22, 2004 07:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
I didn't rate because your stories are like this... Chapter 01: disclamer; Chapter 02 writing; Chapter 04 (linked as Chapter 06) another writing... please correct that! Thanks!!!
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Title: No need for chapter 1
Reviewed By: Ghost Zero On: January 08, 2004 02:37 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 1 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
Where is chapter 1? It really isn't worth it to go forward without chapter 1 not being there. In response to Adorable Akane's review, what this author needs are constructive criticism and telling the auhtor that you really like it doesn't help any. This fic needs to have more content to make it enjoyable and the fact that there is no chapter to put things into perspective makes the story confusing as to how the story starts. Having some sort of prolouge that shows how it all started is a lot better than having several flashback scenes. Using flashback scenes are okay, just don't over use it. To help you along, have a couple of proof readers to help you along. They will be the ones that will make your fic be a better read.
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Reviewed By: Adorable Akane On: October 26, 2003 23:42 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Don't even listen to that 'taxzombie!' I think your storys great and I would luv for you to email me when you update! The idiot who reviewed before me was a complete and total snob! I wouldn't be suprised if she/he was a prep! Don't listen 2 anything that thing says! It's zoned out.... o.O I'v like your story so much that I put it in my 3rd anime info book where I keep all of the stories I have to read. I am not saying that you should be honored for being in my book, I'm just saying I liked your story! Some other people I told that to got the intention that I was snoby and thought my self better than everyone else. Oh got to go! Email me anytime! I open to anything. Ja ne ~Akane~ P.S. taxzombie your an idiot! Haven't you heard the saying if you don't have anything nice to say don't say it at all! Dumbass.
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Reviewed By: taxzombie [MediaMiner Member] On: December 31, 1969 18:00 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 2 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
To quote Rini - Goodness this is boring.
You need to work on giving the story more body.
The characters are flat, there is nothing there to really generate any continuing interest in the story.
This is more of an outline then a story. |
