| "Blood Promises of Old" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] |
Reviewed By: matzes1 On: June 14, 2005 14:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
GREAT STORY!!!! Your math in Chapter 4 is wrong. 2+A=7+3, A would have to equal 8 because 7+3=10 and both sides of the equation must equal, so 2+8=7+3, 10=10. More CHAPTERS, PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: ChrisKaz958 On: May 16, 2005 06:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really good story. You have some interesting elements in your story that add to the mystery. Keep writing please! This story has a lot of potential. I would love to see how it ends. Please update soon.
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Title: wow
Reviewed By: Okashi Ame On: September 07, 2004 23:16 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, that was wonderful! I cant wait to read the rest! you are doing a great job on the story ^.^ It would be an honor to illustrate your work!!I loved the style of writing....The spelling was a little off...but thats ok :D, very creative and yes, your fanfiction was very enjoyable to read! can't wait to read more! ·Okashi·
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Reviewed By: Inu angel [MediaMiner Member] On: April 02, 2004 19:56 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Bold ItalicsFont SizeFont Color I so far luv ur story.Update quick!!
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Reviewed By: Venom Injection On: February 21, 2004 22:49 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Update!
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Reviewed By: lover of all anime On: February 05, 2004 20:05 CST
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this is an interesting story you should continue it so please review by the way was one of the men jasmine speaking to sesshomaru
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Title: Your algebra needs work. ;)
Reviewed By: LJoL On: January 14, 2004 11:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
BTW 'A' does not equal '2' in the equation '2+A=7+3'. Since one side of the equation is known '7+3' we finish that up first leaving us with 2+A=10, next you take the sum of one side and subtract the sum of the known numbers from the other side since both sides are simple additions. 10-2=8 therefor 'A' = '8' not '2'. Weird algebraic errors aside, this was a very amazing fic and well worth the time spent reading it. The grammar and spelling problems were actually a lot more frequent than previous reviewers mentioned, but even those frequent mistakes do not devalue this high quality story. It confuses me very much that such a gem of a plot should find so little fame, but never doubt that your work is wonderful for it truly is. You just need to work on your typos and misused words and it would be practically perfect. For instance, the word 'defiantly' means "to defy something or someone" which is not what you meant in the occasions I saw that word within your story. What you were intending was the word 'definitely' which means "a sure thing". You also mixed up the words 'waist' meaning a body part and 'waste' meaning a misuse/lack of use. Those are just two of the examples I recall from your story, but with a good eye and a desire to do so a person could find so many more. Personally as a reader and sometimes-writer myself I feel that typos and similar mistakes jar me from the flow of the story which is not a good thing, however in the scales of possible problems a story can have it is far down the list when it comes to bad things. Basically for something that you write just for fun these sort of errors are acceptable but do detract from the quality, however if you ever intend to move on from writing fanfiction and into the more serious fields, such as novel writing, you will need to eliminate this deficiency. All that which I have said about this story so far should explain my reasons behind the ratings that I have set for it. I will now close this review by saying that the errors aside, this was a very fun story and quite entertaining.
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Reviewed By: Venom Injection On: January 09, 2004 17:44 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How come you don't have that many reviews? This is an awesome story! Anyway, I hope you keep updating. And I'll enjoy watching Hojo get his butt kicked. ^_^
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Reviewed By: Faye273 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2004 15:39 CST
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I adore your fic! I love love intracite, realistic stories, NOT written by teenagers. Your story is wonderfully crafted and lucid. Though, I do feel especially lucky that I just started reading your fiction recently, and did not have to wait like everyone else for the latest chapter ~_^. I hope that you computer troubles are over (if not impeeded) after your most recent, uh...*cough*"upgrade", and I eagerly await your next chapter.
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Reviewed By: kccranfield On: January 06, 2004 20:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome story. I really enjoyed reading what you have posted. Please continue.
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Reviewed By: me aka the coolest person in the world On: October 03, 2003 22:54 CDT
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really cool so far. in case u care, i do like longer chapters. update soon. *gets down on hands and knees and starts beeging while UNDER desk* sorry i couldnt resist...its an inside joke with my friends who r probably reading this and thinking 'wow! what a loser', but hey i'm bored...so back to you~please update soon like now soon not a month from now soon ok...hope you liked my rambling
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Reviewed By: theultimatedarkness On: October 02, 2003 11:37 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The story is great so far, everything flows perfectly. Keep up your writing and I hope you update soon
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Reviewed By: mo On: September 30, 2003 18:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i'm speechless. all i can say is this is truly an awesome story
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Reviewed By: Naishin no Miko [MediaMiner Member] On: September 30, 2003 13:57 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not certain why you don't have many reviews, but this is a truly amazing story. I was hooked from the very beginning. There are grammar errors, but eh, those can be fixed later. It's the telling of the tale that's important. And an answer to your question about "Blood Thorn", my knowledge of Japanese is still small as I'm still learning, but I believe it would be "Ketsueki no Ibara"; depending on how you use "blood" and "thorn". Hope that helps!
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Reviewed By: moiraineaurian [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2003 20:45 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is a great story so far. I can't wait until you update. Please update as soon as you can. |
