| "Senpai" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: killerman83ca [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2007 11:54 CST
Comment/Review:
Can you please update soon because I would like to know if she will tell him about her love for him or not.
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Title: .1/2 cool
Reviewed By: Brimstonephoenix On: July 02, 2004 00:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
......... its was ok but it wasnt that good either but it was interesting all's I know is in the next chapter he is going to be killed when Naru puts her head through that doo to beat the crap out of him to wake him up like she does every day.. she's going to think they were doing "it" as you waould say I guess.. and what were the girls in a 13 year olds class talking about that. There was one thing that I didnt think was right.. it was that when Keitaro and Shinobu were kissing that naru, motoko, kitsune, or su didnt walk in and kill him XD anyway I look forward to your sequel
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Title: .1/2 cool
Reviewed By: Brimstonephoenix On: July 02, 2004 00:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
......... its was ok but it wasnt that good either but it was interesting all's I know is in the next chapter he is going to be killed when Naru puts her head through that doo to beat the crap out of him to wake him up like she does every day.. she's going to think they were doing "it" as you waould say I guess.. and what were the girls in a 13 year olds class talking about that. There was one thing that I didnt think was right.. it was that when Keitaro and Shinobu were kissing that naru, motoko, kitsune, or su didnt walk in and kill him XD anyway I look forward to your sequel
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Reviewed By: Ede On: June 16, 2004 21:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is written well. It's interesting too, though i'm suprised no-one's tried to 'punish' Keitaro yet. It's too bad you didn't continue it, like you said you would when it was posted.
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Title: write more damnit
Reviewed By: beardedgrunty On: April 16, 2004 01:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
dude, i need to read more of this stuff write more.
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Title: holly shit
Reviewed By: robertson On: October 21, 2003 09:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow that fuckin goo if u dont right another i will kill u
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Title: Hm... Okay...
Reviewed By: Stizzo [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2003 09:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Not bad, except for the fact tha Keitaro has lost his mind. I can sorta see him kissing Shinobu to calm her down, but I think he wouldn't let her sleep in his bed without a second thought. The only reasonable excuse for that is that he has given up on life. But, hey, those are rather minor gripes. Your writing is done well and I guess the dialogue is done okay as well. Now if only the other characters were in the story more...
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