Reviewed By: Dark Angel 666 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 10, 2004 22:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
Hey me Dark Angel again...can i give you a piece of advice "I am now thanks to you,"Takato responded. that sentance...you don't have to keep putting I am now thanks to you," that can get a bit repetitive and can bug the readers. It doesn't but me. Try something like "Let's put it this way, I'm glad you came" or "Thanks a lot. I thought I was dead meat," Anyway...great job...can't wait to see the next chapter.
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