| "Extrication" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Reviewed By: Dr. Vonn Jerry XLII On: November 12, 2003 01:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Eiri's teacher was/is named Yuki Kitazawa (jap. Kitazawa Yuki), and Eiri's younger brother is named Tatsuha Uesugi (jap. Uesugi Tatsuha). I enjoyed your story, but a couple things left me really confused. Are you writing from the manga or from the anime? And what was it you were saying about a sex-change operation? (is that a reference to something that happened in somebody else's story?). The only other thing that confused me was your grammar...but you said that your story had not been revised yet, so I assume that will be fixed when you have some free time on your hands.
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Title: umh
Reviewed By: KuraiMoon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2003 17:22 CST
Comment/Review:
well as far as i know Eiri just cald him 'Sensei' and bout yuki's younger brother i have no idea, i never knew he had a younger brother! 0_0 well anyway just another compliment on your writing >.< am i the only one who reads this or what!?
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