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Title: Update
Reviewed By: evilkitten On: November 06, 2005 17:20 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: evilkitten On: October 29, 2005 20:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update
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Reviewed By: lady_kail On: September 27, 2005 14:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man! That last chapter got me all choked up. In fact, I might need to make a long awaited appointment with my pillow tonight and bawl my eyes out. Keep up the great work.
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Reviewed By: DeeRyoFan~ (again) On: September 25, 2005 15:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
I just saw half of my review is missing and just realized that mediaminer limits the length of the review, yeah, stupid me. What I added was that I hope that Ryo's seeing a woman won't destroy what little self-esteem Dee has. He has to see that his personality and his being a male is not Ryo's problem and he didn't force him into anything. I also hope that Ryo's sending Bikky over to Dee more often during the last weeks doesn't imply that Mary & Ryo are already trying to get rid of him. Then again if Mary would try to do that and if Ryo would realize it, maybe he'd finally take a good, hard look at himself and face the truth. On a critical note, I noticed some tiny mistakes or gaps in logic: in chapter 1 you write that Bikky isn't one for physical affection but in the later chapters you repeatedly describe him as a pretty touchy-feely kid (which I like, he's just a child after all). In chapt. 1, you also call Ryo Dee's husband, which confused me a lot at first *lol*. In the last chapter you write that Dee asked Ryo "Who?" (he is seeing), but I guess that might be a mistake left from an earlier version of the chapter. And I felt you completely forgot about Mother and the kids at the orphanage when Dee's thinking about who would care should he go missing. Other than that you know I love your story to no end and those mistakes don't derogate the greatness of it. Can't wait for an update. I just hope it'll contain some happy news for Dee. Sorry again for the split up review!
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Reviewed By: KitsuneLover12 On: September 25, 2005 12:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is great! I can't wait for another chapter!
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Title: My heart's breaking for Dee!
Reviewed By: DeeRyoFan~ On: September 25, 2005 10:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm hurting for Dee. How can Ryo go out with Mary after that breakdown? What a punch in the gut for Dee. Makes me wanna cry! A**! It's so unfair! I had hoped Ryo'd realize that Mary is not the solution. Now I hope that, since only 2 weeks've past, Mary & Ryo didn't do anything yet. Somehow the idea of Ryo kissing her is even more hurtful than them having sex. Kissing is such an intimate act. Should Dee & Ryo ever get back together (which I still hope for) it'd be something that'd surely bother Dee greatly. But I'm getting way ahead of everything! *lol* While I also side with Dee, of course, there's one thing I've to agree with Ryo on: he's not responsible for Dee's happiness. Ryo can't and shouldn't be the answer to Dee's issues. Dee's to be happy with who he is first, before he can be happy with Ryo, just like Ryo has to accept who he is and be happy with himself first of all, too. In a way, the break up was something both needed to figure their issues out. Despite being the more broken hearted one, Dee is better off than Ryo in a way right now. Lyn's right, he's on the right way, 'coz he's trying to improve himself, to solve his issues on his own and do something for himself. But Ryo? He really needs to stop lying to himself! What does it take to make him see that he's making the biggest mistake of his life? If Dee manages to downright reject him next time he needs him? Would Ryo finally see what he's doing then? I hope so. Poor Dee! He deserves to be fought for!*sa |
Reviewed By: KitsuneLover12 On: September 20, 2005 23:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
I absolutely loved it! I have definitely missed your updates so I hope you won't take as long! So, is it going to be a slow get together, a drastic get together, or an all around tragic ending?
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Reviewed By: Splink On: September 12, 2005 22:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My Impression of Ryo's breakdown, humbly speaking, is…he is at a turning point in his life…will he continue dating this girl to look good and acceptable to society or…will he love the one he truly wants and be scared hairless every time a relative stops by? And what if he does choose to love the one who makes him happy….will he be able to "touch" Dee? Will he be able to give Dee love as freely as he receives it? Can he face his family and those outside his apartment building? It's almost too much….So it's logical that he would began to "un-ravel" so to speak. A rubber band around the wrist can only do so much!!!!! And because Dee has his heart, which I find it strange that Ryo recognizes this fact, he is the first and only person who Ryo thinks of to bring him the comfort that he has been missing ever since Dee left. Which bring me to another point …Does Ryo deserve comfort from Dee? No, in my opinion of course, Ryo is selfish. And his selfishness has caused Dee to feel even more insecure and unworthy of himself. Yet somehow Dee still looks upon Ryo with such love and respect, I quote, "Ryo was a man who inspired love and kindness in others, bringing out the best of those around him". Arrrggggh I don't get it. Dee is precious, will Ryo ever see that?
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Reviewed By: lady_kail On: September 12, 2005 14:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh happy, happy day! You updated!!! I absolutely love this story. OK, yeah, Ryo is a bit of a cry-baby, but it fits in with the manga that he goes to Dee when he breaks. Please, try not to leave us waiting so long.
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Reviewed By: dragonstar1949@yahoo.com On: August 12, 2005 18:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope it's not too long before another update! I'm loving this story and I want to see how it works out (hopefully to the happily ever after that I want for Dee and Ryo, but... I'll see, huh?) I love Dee through this especially, and the relationship between him and Bikky. Write more -- please.... please... please
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Reviewed By: evean On: July 06, 2005 07:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story, it made me cry. It's very touching, deep and realistic. Denial can do a lot of strange things to you. I like you characterization of Dee, his layers of personality, his insecurities. It's nice to see a person, not a bunch of cliches.Thank you for great time and please, update soon.
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Reviewed By: lady_kail On: June 21, 2005 14:12 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You updated!!!!! I love you. Please keep it up. I've been addicted since the first chapter.
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Reviewed By: LAChick [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2005 15:12 CDT
Comment/Review:
update soon!!!!! Ryo is being mean to Dee!! I need that to be fixed before my life could be bliss again. Oh and please up date your other story about Dee, Ryo, Lyn, and Drew too. The one where Dee's blind. That one needs a happy ending. Keep up the awsome writing.
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Reviewed By: jenay On: June 19, 2005 10:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Really great story :) You're so damn good!
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Reviewed By: Mauztattoo [MediaMiner Member] On: April 13, 2005 22:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Aaargh! Please write more! I can't wait until Ryo comes to his senses, or Lynn decideds to try polyamory?
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