| "Shinnen" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: May-VeggieGirl1 (too lazeh to log in ^_^;) On: June 19, 2005 15:10 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked how you turn normal words into japanese for the title, it makes it cool. ^^ As far as I saw, spelling was done well. Witty remarks at the end aren't bad either. If anything you're making Kakashi seem to weak, lol. I think the main reason I appriciate this fic is because you don't immeditely rush them into a relationship. I had doubt when I first started reading it but it still progressing. Everything had high scores in my book, I hope you update soon!
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Reviewed By: Ko On: January 20, 2005 22:33 CST
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Yay~ recent-ish update :3
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Reviewed By: Geuna On: January 20, 2005 10:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
(DROOLS) Ooooh, the updated extended chapters were soooo awesome! I saw that chapters 1-6 were also edited on ff.net, so I'm going to try and review there as well as soon as I can. I LOVE this fic, and I adore how dark but honest you make Kakashi and Iruka's characters, which soon almost took CANON to be true. I also love how you make Iruka's relationship with Naruto something special, while at the same time show that it isn't a "bed or roses" or whatever the saying is. The grammar at some points was a little or, but by no means anything that makes the story and writing style any less amazing. I know it takes you a while to update and such, but that's really okay. I'll wait as looong as I need to more more. ^__^ This story is worth it! Also, if you don't mind, I'd like that post the fact that you've made these changes on the Kakairu lj community sometime. ^__^' AWESOME job, this story is so breathtaking!
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Reviewed By: shoei On: September 15, 2004 23:51 CDT
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Awesome story. The plot's original, and the relationship between Iruka and Naruto is very true to the manga. The relationship between Iruka and Kakashi is strong but subtle. I also liked how you wrote what happened to Iruka's parents in the Kyubi incident (I haven't read much of the manga) but it gives me a good image of how it happened. The Anbu who rescued Iruka was also a nice touch. You haven't updated in a while, but I hope we will eventually find out what's really going on. Thank you for the great read!
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Reviewed By: cdk On: May 19, 2004 14:35 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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Thsi story is really great. I like how you write the memory scenes and the 'hallucination' scene for Iruka. I am really interested in the plot and who the antagonist is. I'm also waiting for some Kak/Iru action :) cdk
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Reviewed By: Dvana [MediaMiner Member] On: April 14, 2004 20:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very nice work here. ^^ I'm impressed by your fight scene, especially if it's your first one. And your characterization is dead on. (not to mention your grammar and spelling ar mercifully correct... yay...) Honestly, I usually try to leave some constructive criticism, but so far I'm having trouble coming up with something. Thanks for posting this. Bravo!
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Reviewed By: Kile On: February 08, 2004 21:23 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the fic! The reason for the nine in spelling and grammer was for some of the quotation marks were in the wrong places, cause I doubt some would say what they wanted to say, and then put, 'Iruka said' at the end. . .the only person I know who does that is Alexis. . .By the way, you had me wondering where it was really Eddie Izzard when you said the 'cake or death' part at the end of Chapter six. He's so funny! Anywho, the fic is awesome. Please continue! Write fanfiction or death! Yesssss! n_n
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Reviewed By: Kile On: February 08, 2004 21:22 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the fic! The reason for the nine in spelling and grammer was for some of the quotation marks were in the wrong places, cause I doubt some would say what they wanted to say, and then put, 'Iruka said' at the end. . .the only person I know who does that is Alexis. . .By the way, you had be wondering where it was really Eddie Izzard when you said the 'cake or death' part at the end of Chapter six. He's so funny! Anywho, the fic is awesome. Please continue! Write fanfiction or death! Yesssss! n_n
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Reviewed By: *Elizabeth*Marie*Rose* [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2003 21:06 CST
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*Smiles* Very good work! Keep it up and please continue!
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