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| "Vegeta and Bulma Forever!!!" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Liorella [MediaMiner Member] On: March 24, 2008 06:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
First of all, because of the summary, I wouldn't even go near the actual story. The grammar is, to be frank, atrocious and seems to be written by an eleven year old. Second, the fact that you are holding out based on your reviews is extremely child. Anyone who actually writes for the sake of writing will find this unbelievably immature and fairly ridiculous. I'm sure you could be a decent writer, but you need to use spell check and write for the sake of writing, not the reviews. Also, the title should be rethought. It sounds like a really bad forum topic.
| Reviewed By: FataLFelineOfTheNight [MediaMiner Member] On: October 06, 2004 20:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 4 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 1 of 10 Comment/Review:
sorry, but u need 2 work on ur spelling & give more detail.
| Reviewed By: The Oujis Mate [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2003 17:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
First of all, this is the lowest rating I've ever given a story. Second, with such bad grammar, no flow at all, and a bad story set up you can't even expect 5 reviews. The idea behind the story is great, you just have to learn how to write. I guess try harder.
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Reviewed By: Nalalina [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2003 19:30 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 1 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 1 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 1 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your story doesn't make a whole lotta sense. It jumps around way too much. In one chapter it went from first meeting to Bulma and Vegeta getting married. It seems as if you took several ideas and crammed them into the same paragraph. It doesn't flow like a story should. You need to add more detail and the story will flow better and be easier to read.
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