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| "Legend of Zelda: Ocarina of Time fanfiction/novelization" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: May 15, 2005 16:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
First off, you have several strengths working for you. Description is the most apparent, as well as character. The style of the writing is done with few flaws. Some of the transistions seemed choppy at times, however overall it flowed smoothly. The overall introductions were okay, however this is one thing you can and should improve on. At times you introduce a charater by giving a small backdrop on them and continueing. This is okay, but to move the writing up a notch, use character diolouge to tell the reader "This person's jelous." Or "This one is his rival." Readers should be able to figure that out without it being bluntly stated. I did notice one or two grammer errors, typos, and the such. They were few and far between, but perhaps onemore run with that spelling/grammer program is in order. Overall this was really well done and very enjoyable. Mainly because I ended up reading all four chapters. Good job and thank you for submitting to FFARG.
| Title: Cool!
Reviewed By: Deya_X [MediaMiner Member] On: May 10, 2005 12:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
The ending was sad, but 'twas a beautiful work of art. Congrats on making a cool version of OoT-I wish it could have been longer. It's always cool to see that Link has the ability to speak....and when he does, it's nice when authors can give him a good personality. Very well written! (applauds)
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