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| "A Future Uncertain" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Title: GOMEN!
Reviewed By: Psycho Demoness [MediaMiner Member] On: January 18, 2004 22:35 CST
Comment/Review:
I'M SO SORRY!! Please don't be mad. I didn't mean it to sound like that but I've gotten really used to saying 'crap' and yeah. And I didn't think that my opinion would really matter. I just didn't really like how you formatted the dialogue. Instead of doing "blah" you did this weird way I had a hard time reading. But I think the plot is great. However, how you make the words sound, it seems like the sentences are too...choppy. Like this: 'She ran upstairs. She opened the door. She went to the drawers and changed.' I just thought if I wrote a flame you would make it better. And you kinda did...but now i feel soooo guilty. >___< GOMENASAI!
| Reviewed By: Psycho Demoness [MediaMiner Member] On: January 17, 2004 19:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm really sorry about this...I never ever write flames or anything but...this story is kind of crappy. I mean the storyline is pretty good, but how you write it makes it sound so...boring.
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