Reviewed By: Mooselini McSqueegee [MediaMiner Member] On: January 12, 2004 23:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Just a few things to say. For the style of writing, I gave you a nine because, well, no one is perfect. For spelling & grammar I gave you an eight because you had a few spelling errors. For example "meat" should be "meet", unless Andie is a walking steak.... "gorgouse" should be "gorgeous", "hire" should be "hair", and "woth" should be "with". The originality/creativity received an eight as well, because it was rather bland with very little catching words. This is what led me to my decision on the enjoyment factor. It was bland, and I'm not meaning to be rude, but it was slightly boring. Also, it was a short chapter and moved by too quickly. If you wish to keep the readers' attention, you should extend the length of your chapters and describe the situations more thoroughly. Okay.... this is getting pretty long, so I'm going to leave it at that. Please update soon!
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