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| "A Past Reawakened" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Tanzanite Falcon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2006 20:51 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you know, i'm going through all of your stopries and they don't even have 10 reviews each. what's with that? any way this tory is awesome. i love it. update. btw ami should be with ryou
| Reviewed By: Hikari Mirai On: January 26, 2004 20:32 CST
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I'm only on chapter 3/4 but your story is great. I'm still going to review later.. but this is just for the voting. Um.. Ami/Kaiba I think. I don't know. Oh and you have a few spelling mistakes.. And it's Lunarian not Lunaian or whatever. Keep up the awesome story! I like it. Uh.. I saw Yu-Gi-Oh in english. Can you make a list thing of the names. Hehe..Thanks, bye!
| Reviewed By: TsunamiCat96 On: January 22, 2004 23:24 CST
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Okay,first off,I really don't know what pairing should be,but I JUST MUST GIVE YOU A FEW POINTERS. #1:There should be more of Ami not knowing what to do. The readers should be more intent on what your centric character is going to do if their confused about what to do. #2:More characters should be introduced. Such as a whole 'nother group of senshis(scouts) as prtectors for Ami. Perhaps a whole 'nother group of Saphire holders? Sidenote-If you already have the plot and dialouges planned out,then please ignore the pointers. But otherwise,please take your time to consider using at least one of my pointers. Also,if you take the liberty of making protectors,if you run out of OCs,I have an old YGO/SM charrie. But,I must say,I think I was the only who took the time to read your magnificent ficcie. Some people might not notice that as this fic progresses,it becomes intreging. I encurage you to continue. TC Whoops,forgot to make suggestion for you... If you need a title,I suggest 'The Shaphire Crystal'. Now for REAL, TC
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