| "Little Kitten" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: midnight lotus [MediaMiner Member] On: April 21, 2004 21:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like the attempt to have someone new join the Blade Breakers and all...but I think you could do much better. Kitty seemed to be a little on the Mary Sue side. Beating out Kai and Tyson...they are damn good, and it'll take time before she'll ever get that good. The story seemed a bit rushed, especially the rape scene. And then Kitty somehow got over it really fast? Something like that sticks with you for a while. Question...where's the song? It states that this story is a songfic. I also found that the Author's Notes popping up everywhere was a bit distracting. Maybe you should stick them in the beginning of the chapters. And you probably shouldn't devote a whole chapter to the ages of the characters. You should be able to state that in the story (in some creative, cool way ^_^). Note: This is not a flame. I hope I helped!
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Title: that was so sweet
Reviewed By: Riku_is_hot_2030 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 15, 2004 17:47 CST
Comment/Review:
just what the title says. I love kitty!! She was so sweet. Even I couldn't help but smile and laugh. Thanks for making me feel better. Bad day at school. Oh well... hope to read more of your stories! Riku_2030
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Title: i love it
Reviewed By: Baby_A [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2004 23:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it. It's great! Baby_A
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