Title: Good Job!
Reviewed By: MoonStarDutchess [MediaMiner Member] On: August 12, 2005 00:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't like Inuyasha and Kagome in romantic fanfictions. I prefer her matched with someone else. However, I was very interested in the story. There's a few grammar errors that I'd like to tell you about. I know I'd want someone to tell me. In the first paragraph second to the last sentence you state that Inuyasha looked upset. You stated it twice in the same sentence. It makes reading that sentence weird. In the 12th line Know is used wrong. It's suspose to be No. Finally, in the 14th line you have Just Say It, Inuyasha. You should but the coma after Inuyasha and it would make the sentence easier to read. I sometime make mistakes like that as well. With all this uploading crap no wonder. I'll review your other fics Bye! In the first paragraph you
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