Reviewed By: Snow_Bunnie [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2004 11:51 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's an interesting story, you might want to add a glossery at the bottom or top i.e. ohayou-good morning daijobu- are you ok? ect. It might seem obvious but some people the only Japanese they know is Konichi wa and hai. ^.^ You have some subject verb agreement problems and your tenses are sometimes a little off. I like the story, you might just want to let a friend or parent proofread it for you. It's very hard to catch your own mistakes, like sometimes I'll write dose instead of does and it will look correct to me. Even in this reveiw I probaly have some mistakes. It just helps to have another person read it. I am looking forward to more! Bunnie
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