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| "The Order of the Purple Robe" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: It's me again...I'm back from College!
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 18, 2004 21:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
Why have you not updated yet? Or maybe you did but I probably haven't noticed since I was pretty busy this month. I was wondering if anyone polled for names...I dunno...was that what you called it? I kinda noticed this huge paragraph before the teaser or was it chapter 13? Okay, somewhere around chapter 13 to 14, you had this huge paragraph that kind of should be broken down. Also, I realized that you have too much "he stated, he yelled, she said." You don't need that all the time really. In addition, your format looks quite similar to mine...was that intentional? I'm not sure, but it's okay if you did, because I really don't care about format and such. Well, I'm hoping that I didn't discourage you too much and like I stated before I would really look forward to reading more of your story. Oh, and one thing! You shouldn't be writing for the single purpose of getting reviews, you should be writing because you like to write. If a majority of people flamed you and said that your fanfiction was terrible for no apparent reason at all. You should keep on writing no matter what... as long as you have that passion to write, then there's nothing stopping you. Alright, that's enough advice from me! Gook luck to you Hiimbob979 and see you around.
| Reviewed By: Queen of the Damned [MediaMiner Member] On: March 13, 2004 13:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story. Besides I am a big Final Fantasy fan and I love playing the games.
| Title: Hi again!
Reviewed By: Amy (it says I'm not logged in) [MediaMiner Member] On: March 11, 2004 08:24 CST
Comment/Review:
Actually, I was mistaken about the second or third chapter, it was the first chapter after your prologue that was confusing because you did not space the dialogue out. Your story is not bad at all, it's quite good. Just don't forget to space out your (not "her"...sorry) paragraphs. I look forward to reading more of your story:-)
| Title: Hi! How are you?
Reviewed By: AmyAnderson45 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 10, 2004 09:59 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your intro (or prologue) was not bad but you really should fix that first sentence...it doesn't really make any sense. In addition, maybe you could break up her paragraphs just a bit. It gets rather confusing who's talking to who by the second or third chapter. Anyway, it seems to have a quite different plotline compared to so many fanfictions that I've read before and it's actually very appealing to me.
| Reviewed By: Hiimbob979 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 09, 2004 22:32 CST
Comment/Review:
Hey guys, this is the author speaking. This is a really good book, you should try reading it. A couple of my friends have complained that they "just couldn't put it down." Please leave me lotsa reviews! :)
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