Reviewed By: kanzeyori On: September 04, 2004 08:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
too many adjectives, use more muscular language. CRIMSON eyes, PASTY skin, etc. etc. aren't really needed most of the time. We know what they look like, get to the story
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