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"That particular night" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ]
 Title: woohoo!
Reviewed By: deunank [MediaMiner Member]  On: May 06, 2004 09:37 CDT
Rating(s):
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
Lost me a little with the 2nd to last paragraph: "Oh, not that they not told each other," Did you mean "Oh, not that they did not tell each other,"? Anyway, very cool. Yeah, Aya should be broody like that, and Yohji should be accepting but wish that Aya didn't brood like that. Very very cool. Short and sweet. Yay, I liked it a lot.
 Reviewed By: babaca [MediaMiner Member]  On: April 30, 2004 12:07 CDT
Comment/Review:
This is nice. I'm sure Aya would perpetually feel a need to remember that he almost lost. I just have one minor quibble: There is no such word as "particulary" I think you mean "particular". (Particularly wouldn't make sense as a title and the last sentence of your fic). I'm not trying to be mean. It just makes me scratch my head.

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