Reviewed By: angelchan [MediaMiner Member] On: May 09, 2004 21:29 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Okay, you know me, imouto: I like to focus on mechanics then story. I saw quite a few comma splices along the way, not enough to upset the read of the story but still enough to distract. I'm sorry I didn't catch it in the first read, but it's just "Moon Eternal Make-up". In the final season, she does not add "Power" to the transformation sequence. As for the story... you know well how much I love it, considering how much I begged you for updates along the way. And now I can't wait to see the next chapter. It has me very intruiged. Keep up the good work!
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