| "Toruko Meets the Sohma's" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: empressariyana [MediaMiner Member] On: August 18, 2004 13:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The two chapters you got posted could use a little tightening up. Do not put your author's notes into the story they disturb the flow. You need to describe your lead character better as to get a better picture of who she is. Reframe from making side comments in the story. If a character is using sarcasm then just say She said sarcastically or The sarcasm was evident in her tone. The story has potential but you need to change a few things. When I do a parody I tend to lack description but for my real stories I try to put as much description as I can. I am always revising, re-editing and reposting my work to make it better for the readers. Don't get disheartened that no one reviews. Most of the MM readers just like to read. It doesn't mean they are not interested in your writings. Keep writing and I will keep reviewing I promise. By the way I post under empressariyana I am just to lazy to login.
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Reviewed By: ilovekyosohma [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2004 20:23 CDT
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Only one person reviews me,T_T...
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Reviewed By: animegirl411 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 19, 2004 15:37 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Reviewed By: animegirl411 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 13, 2004 06:52 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Reviewed By: animegirl411 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2004 19:32 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Reviewed By: animegirl411 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2004 20:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very good. I think this was so awsome.
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