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| "Water and Electricity" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: bffimagine [MediaMiner Member] On: March 20, 2005 16:24 CST
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Aw, poor Ban-chan. Kinda funny to see him tortured by someone but me *evil laugh* Poor Ginji!
| Reviewed By: Ice Dragon3 On: June 29, 2004 12:21 CDT
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I like your story a lot. ^^ You kept the story moving on nicely, but because you kept it so fast pace, I felt some parts could've been explained a tad bit more. Such as WHY the keys where still in the car; was someone supposed to pick it up to despose of it? (You did a nice job of explaining why they took the car in the first place, though. ^^) There were several other small parts like that, and you should probably just go over your work to make sure everything seems reasonable. Your story is too good to not be perfected. ^^ If you do go over and explain a little bit more, then this amazing fic will becoming even more outstanding. Overall, I loved the story!!! ^_______^ The ending was a perfect touch. ^^ Au revior!
| Reviewed By: destinys lot On: June 14, 2004 21:51 CDT
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Hiya fun story, a bit more description would help us to see what going on instead of being told. So instead of saying 'he looked sad.' describe what sad looks like. anyway i enjoyed it. ja ne
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