| "Fortune of Dreams" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 12, 2007 17:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh no! whats going wrong? i skagome under some sort of curse? if so then who cursed her? was it sessh's second wife? is that why she woke up bleeding? and why she seems sick? and why couldnt sesshomaru smell the blood later when he went into the room. i mean you think he would smell something like that even if they took all the blood out. oh i have so mant questions! please update soon i cant wait to find out what happens next. this is an amazing story keep up the great work!!!
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Reviewed By: dreamer789 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 11, 2007 20:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
nooooo!!!!!!!! its been forever since youve updated and this is such a great story! you need to updated it! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! PLEASE! lol i bet you thought that was never going to end! but please udpate soon i need to know whats going to happen next. sessh's second wife is getting all jelous, you cant leave us like that! its cruel and unusuall punishment! please updated soon. ~dreamer
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Title: Update
Reviewed By: Kenmei *to lazy to log in* On: July 31, 2005 04:39 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please please please update soon
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Reviewed By: shymiko [MediaMiner Member] On: July 21, 2004 00:18 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like your story. Please update soon ^.^ Shy
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness(not signed on) On: May 25, 2004 12:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not done reading all the way yet but I thought I'd give and early review. To explain my ratings: Your spelling a grammar could use a lot of work. Most of the problems are putting the wrong words in the wrong places like when you mean 'Not' and you put in 'No'. and some words are supposed to be plural and they're missing the 's'. Also you seem to have a problem keeping the story in one tense, like first it will be past tense and then it changes to present tense. ex: 'Why didn't you wake me up eariler?" and then she replies- "I tried but you won't wake." That makes it sound like he's still asleep when he was just talking to her. It should have been "I tried, but you wouldn't wake." When you write you need to keep it in one tense unless it's in a flash back. That same thing also cut into your style of writing. And my rating for originality was low because I've seen many stories like this one. Enjoyment factor was low because the characters are so OOC "out of character". Kagome is just letting Sesshoumaru push her around and Inuyasha is never that nice. But most of your spelling/grammar problems can be fixed if you would simply prof-read your chapters before uploading them, and try reading the whole thing out loud to yourself to see if it sounds right and if it's in the right tense. I hope I was able to help.
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