| "So Near, Yet So Far" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] |
Title: The Otaku
Reviewed By: Fionn On: July 30, 2004 13:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Good job on chapter four you did a good job writeing the fight scene and Sakura. As for the Origami no Jutsu of the Paper sisters I agree that Naruto shouldn't be able to learn it, he'd probably try though, and i don't think Sasuke should either, he to has to many cool jutsu's and he's a jerk. On the other hand it'd be pretty cool if Sakura could learn to wield the same power as the paper sisters.
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Title: The Otaku
Reviewed By: Fionn On: July 23, 2004 14:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
The chapters are too short but other than that this is a very good fic. I'd suggest that you make the sister's power over paper like either a bloodline limit (impossible to copy) or like Choji's multisize Jutsu (usible only by those with certion prerequiset physical qualitys). Anyway keep up the good work on this fic!
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