Reviewed By: Wolfeh On: August 07, 2004 20:31 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm..Seems I am your first reviewer...o.o I suppose constructive criticisim (how in the world do you spell it anyways? o.o) ish the best I can give....^--^ Some areas of your story have errors with grammar, or the way the sentence is constructed. Sometimes the sentence flows perfectly, and other times it seems to just crash like a speeding train. Somtimes there need to be commas, and sometimes the sentence needs more to it or it becomes a fragment of a sentence. But the story is pretty original, but just needs a pinch of creativity. Also, more explination wouldn't hurt. Make it so readers can get a nice image in our minds, practically see what you want us to see. But anyways....before you go getting mad at me for being all critical, its a fairly nice story, and I bet you would do alot better if people out there would simply review and tell you what needs to be fixed like I did, than it would help...^-^ *pokes everyone reading* You know you wanna review...=P Signed with Wolfeh pawprints,~~Wolfeh~~
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